It is very interesting
#christian poetry / fall from grace
nimble stratus
north bobcat
It is very interesting
Elaborate!
nimble stratus
Elaborate!
That may have come out incorrectly, I like it a lot. The message is great I personally think the transition to the "blackbird" could be a bit smoother but I am new to this as well so I could be wrong. Either way good job.
north bobcat
That may have come out incorrectly, I like it a lot. The message is great I pers...
There was enough of a transition to it , I feel. From this dove seeing angels fall from the sky, submitting to sin, converting away from jesus and into sin, he falls down with the angels
But I can see what you mean.. 🤔
urban remnant
It isn’t the smoothest read and a lot of it is loose and needs interpreting which is fun. I’m assuming this dove is a Christian trying to get to heaven, yet under the constant chaos and influence of sin they fall and become tainted. It feels like someone telling the story or trying to warn/advise someone who plans to take the same journey as the dove.