Gilead

[dawn gyro]

Succinct, swell, intriguing. I've always loved your poetry, it has this quality that I can only describe as "direct and honest." You wrap not meaning in whatever simile that I like to use (a la what Alberto said in https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1308577662830252124), you let it speak for itself, beautiful and weird in all its beauty

Write more! ❤️

[fiery shard]

I'm glad you can appreciate some of my direct stuff, I have the most fun with these!, a more typical approach by me can be found in #1307967989047623721 or #1308275407916896337. The work I'm most proud of is #1308349059077111818

[dawn gyro]

Yep, I'm loving every second of it

Oh yeah, if you want, do review my recent stuffs, too! 😄

I honestly like some critics

[raven sorrel]

this one is so nice

[hearty sinew]

Ooof, okay
My interpretation
A soft shadow of expectation of shouldering burdens is stark, but subtle
Lineage, heairchy, and upholding of the order, by the person yet to fathom the depth under the tight rope they are walking on
It has both familial innocence and familial dread in what's known an what's foreshadowed
And of course, your casual mastery in words only requires you to use a handful of words to convey complex emotions
I don't know how u do it lol

[tidal dawn]

Wonderful! @hearty sinew has just pregressed to level 15!

[fiery shard]

YOU NAILED IT GAAAHHH im so happy

[hearty sinew]

IM HAPPY TOO LOL

[fiery shard]

[glacial quest]

@fiery shard good one ♥️♥️

[fiery shard]

I've thought about this review a ton, and to thank you properly, I just want to say you're one of few people that have made me feel understood and appreciated my approach to poetry. Ik this is a short poem but it came from a place of pure unadultered emotion and intimacy, I was striving for minimalism and having that message hit home was more than gratifying. Thank you so so much, and much love.

I'm super confident with my stuff until I share it lol

[fiery shard]

You too Amira ❤️

[raven sorrel]

i barely said anything!! honestly “i fly the line of father” is one of the best lines i’ve read

[hearty sinew]

Well, then, thank you for writing such poems haha. Seriously. And well, your poetry being selected for different pin ups are well, evident in and of itself. So, Boi, dw, I'm not the only one lol. But I'm glad to be one of them

[raven sorrel]

such a great line 🕺🏻

[fiery shard]

Well that was an artsy fartsy one that I threw a ton of high level words into

Stuff like this is closer to the heart of my character

If that sounds pretentious in some way, I'm sorry it's just how I feel dunno how to explain that

I'm a simple dude

[raven sorrel]

that’s a good thing

if a poem like this reflects your character rather than a fancier one, it doesn’t mean ur simple it shows you are good

[fiery shard]

Doll is a reflection of plain old anxiety and ties back to a specific person in my life without getting too personal. It's not about me, and so I could describe in fervent detail how I feel, this one's more a reflection of my coming of age and how lost I felt when I first left home, and to an extent probably always will feel. It's more intimately centered around my experience of self.

Anyway this is all silly stuff

What matters is what y'all get out of it

I try to keep stuff open ended in That regard

[raven sorrel]

i actually couldn’t tell that was what doll was about

i did feel desperation, anxiety upon a reread perhaps, but i would never guess you had a person in mind

[fiery shard]

The doll is the person

It's journey is my feelings in regards to them

[raven sorrel]

🏃‍♀️ running to reread it

[fiery shard]

Gibe-lures, gibe means a leering insult, lure---> bait

Going off the aquatic theme I used keel

Which is a sinking boat

[raven sorrel]

🧐📝

[hearty sinew]

Nah, pretty crystal clear actually. I could tell that doll was another story while this was urs lol

[raven sorrel]

i feel now i looked at doll not enough

[fiery shard]

You must really love to read

I never understood stuff like this till I was way older

[raven sorrel]

i think it’s so cool how well you grasp poems :D.

[fiery shard]

I had to re read so much stuff in uni

[raven sorrel]

i hope to understand better too when im older

[hearty sinew]

Was that not evident? Lol, it was handcrafted with care too, but well, it was clear that you were imagining your experiences on another story, like an actor talking about their character they played from there imagination, while this one is true

[raven sorrel]

maybe i should’ve paid attention in english class

[fiery shard]

I genuinely thought I did

[hearty sinew]

Awwww thank you!!❤️❤️ I see that you are a fellow appreciator of the same too lol

[fiery shard]

Well yea but I think I only used one or two indicating articles

[raven sorrel]

i was always better at maths (that’s why i’m studying it)

[fiery shard]

Just impressed is all that you differentiated it

Most people took it as a literal story on all poetry

[dawn fulcrum]

*Most people took it

as a literal story

on all poetry*

- .deusxmachina

[raven sorrel]

i only liked english passively, i crammed the content so i could pass only, i never really listened in lessons

[fiery shard]

Lmao

Not that it bothers me to take it that way

I made it a story for a reason

[hearty sinew]

Ahh, well, assuming u are still talking about me...thank you haha,
-# I'm shy now

[fiery shard]

Yes and you're welcome

[raven sorrel]

random but how do u do the small text

[fiery shard]

is it this

No

[raven sorrel]

** hello **

hello

[fiery shard]

[[is it this]]

[hearty sinew]

Haha I will tell you a trick to know instantly how somebody does a font in discord

[fiery shard]

-# I'm shy now

Copy paste

[hearty sinew]

So, you...just copy the text of the font you wish to imitate in your own dialogue box
-# you can see the symbols etc they used to make it happen

[hearty sinew]

Yup!

[raven sorrel]

-# HELLO

YAY

[fiery shard]

Didn't think of that lol

[raven sorrel]

**hello

-#hi

-# hi

there we go

[hearty sinew]

Hahaha lol, im a genius afterall
-# flips hair

[hearty sinew]

YAYYYY

✨💃

[fiery shard]

😂

Yes you are goober

I knew what you meant

[hearty sinew]