fever dreams/midnight sun | ➼ by Rain

[blissful mural]

@polar dune has sent a notification! - @slim laurel @frail summit @marsh dust @strange stratus

[polar dune]

@ionic canyon

@spare token here

[spare token]

ill have to read this a few times cuz idk what some of these words even mean

you write like me

[polar dune]

is this good or bad

[spare token]

you see i could take this as an insult but i wont

id say thats a good thing

[polar dune]

nah i wasn't trying to insult, i was genuinely wondering

[spare token]

ik

u havent read my writing so you wouldnt know such beauty

[polar dune]

i actually looked up your poems

scoured post-own

[spare token]

uh oh

some of my poems suck im scared now

[polar dune]

too late, buddy

[polar dune]

@dusk socket

[frail summit]

The word choices are perfect and so are the imageries. I really like the constant rhyme in here plus how well it sonically flows. Great job pinkbow <3

[polar dune]

TY JANEBUG

i was trying to stick with all the technical aspects of the sonnet (meter + rhyme scheme) while still making it sound like me

kind of a personal challenge to see if i can write by myself using structure

[frail summit]

You did great here!

[dusk socket]

WOW! Omg omg I love that rain, this is so awesome

I seriously love it

This is amazing

Like I love your vocabulary and I love the rhyme and the rhyme scheme you did

This is amazing

Man I am actually sad I didn't read this masterpiece earlier, I am so sorry

[strange stratus]

Wow! Really interesting structure - something i don't see all too much of; that being a solid form, yet with the 'modern' breath of ending a verse unnaturally, in the middle of a sentence. As such, it sort of creates two ways of reading the poem - as a text, or as verses. Very well written on that part.

At the same time, I absolutely adore the imagery, specifically the "nothing-harvests" of the "garden grounds where nothing grows" - such a paradoxical, yet sensical image. If nothing grows in the garden, the the harvests are nothing either. Yet, it is a thing completely out of the normal in our world.

VWW.

[foggy wraith]

So good it crashed my discord

[strange stratus]

HAHAH SAME I went to check my wifi when I opened since the comments werent loading

[foggy wraith]

Lmfao

[polar dune]

Tysm 🩷🩷

and don’t worry

I’m happy you liked it

[polar dune]

tbh i set off in hopes of creating a semi-accurate shakespearean sonnet, with the correct meter and all. i did hope to use enjambments to make it look more modern lol, i’m glad that someone noticed that.
as for the paradox of the ground and harvests, that is the intention—nothing grows in these grounds, and consequently, the nothing is then harvested.

A little note, this poem is about depression

[polar dune]

@open crown

[open crown]

[polar dune]

thanks for the review

[marsh dust]

Midnight sun... That's a ME REFERENCE!
(My poem "Screecher of The Night")

[prisma berry]

*Midnight sun... That's a

ME REFERENCE! (My poem

"Screecher of The Night")*

- Kevs The Walking Angel

[marsh dust]

Girl.

[open crown]

That wasnt my actual review

[polar dune]

i knowww

I’m pulling ur leg

[open crown]

Ik you have to bc your so short smh

[polar dune]

SHUT UP 😭

Im not short

im average

and you’re just gargantuan proportions

[ionic canyon]

RAINB POEM! AMAZING AND BEAUTY AND RARE I LOVE IT

[shut bison]

Meter make me happy

[polar dune]

@vast agate

[vast agate]

Again, since this has been written in the the style of older English, I had a hard time completely understanding the meaning ( this is what I get for being foreign ), but the words flow so beautifully 😭

It's like a river of melted chocolate, ever-flowing

Poems like these help by vocabulary in crease 😂

[polar dune]

aaa

[zinc bane]

Of the ever gorgeous writing of rain