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Thank you

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Your motif is strong as always, the imageries are so vivid! Thanks for inspiration and sharing!hearthands

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oh wow great poem! this is the kind of poem i expect to see when looking for an ornate one. "The morning is a shy seamstress" is definitely one of the best similes I've read in the past week. Most of the similes and metaphors sound great. I'm still confused about "ancient cloaks" cuz why are the clouds equated to being ancient. also the people compared to "currents" is not a very strong metaphor because visually, people coming and going doesnt look lke the highs and lows of a current. the final stanza was VERY emotionally overwhelming. the title feels a little overly dramatic but i think this poem was emotionally very charged. a GREAT poem.

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# still grail oh wow great poem! this is the kind of poem i expect to see when looking for an ...

Thank you, I’m glad you enjoyed reading it. Regarding Clouds- they can feel ancient because they are part of nature’s timeless cycle. They are ever-present in our skies, continuously shifting but always there. I used it as a metaphor for wisdom & endurance. Now coming to people as currents While currents may ebb & flow like the bustling movement of people, they also represent underlying forces. Just as currents are shaped by deeper forces people’s movements often carry a depth of emotion, purpose & a connection isn’t it ?

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These are some really beautiful images.

The shy seamstress stitching light, and the silver hand that smoothes the shore in particular are really striking to me.

Your work is always subtly but resiliently optimistic. Your voice is a romantic one. I appreciate that.

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New word learned: Seamstress. I always love your use of metaphors and imageries plus how seamless you make them read. Its perfect!

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@brave gust

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Ah, nature one! — I found it —. It captures the beauty of nature, and the fragile existence of humans so profoundly. You are on the way to being the next @harsh zealot I guess... It just took me on a ride, through the world and allowed me to explore the hidden beauties. It's one of those, where instead of trying to interpret, best to "ride" the poem instead.

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*The ocean is a silver hand that reaches
to smooth the wrinkles of the shore,
gathering stones into its palm,
whispering them into sand,
a soft lullaby of tides. * This feels like a Mary Oliver poem

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tardy jolt
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Lol

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# tardy jolt Lol

I thought he was implying that he read the same stanza before ….😅

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That's how I see him

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As I haven't been asked to try to give feedback on other people's poetry, I preferred to pay attention to this one because of the image, which conveniently fits very well within the poetic structure.

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We can see that there is a stupendous work of metaphors, where everything is drawn as if it were not only the scope of a vision, but the realization of life being recorded in many graceful and crucial moments.

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But the words emerge through a rather restrictive, respectful facet, where they initially prevail, but little by little they blossom like an excellent song or even a perfect, magical orchestra that leads us to a divine plea.

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It's mature poetry, very contoured par excellence, made with a lot of care, and that's very evident. I feel I've wasted some of my time by not coming here first and evaluating what has been written.

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This poem is very, very consistent, respectful and understands exactly where it should have ended. I also liked how the verses could refer to a person, idem, and how special they can be. I really enjoyed it, 👏.

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ionic echo
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We are truly like stars because stars are bright like our souls, some of which are darker, dimmer or brighter than others but they all have one thing in common...They die.

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@hushed moss

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mortal helm
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Wow, I wrote a whole poem inspired by these two dots by great @tribal crow

harsh zealot
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@regal marsh

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If they can justify it, then I have all the rights as well isn’t it ? 🤔

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