#When She left....

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chilly lake
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Roll no. 19

oh!! that’s me
sorry, miss,

oh!! that’s me
sorry, miss,

where are you staring?
are you lost?

miss, that smile is gone

what did you say?
it’s gone...

silent...

no, miss, listen
ever since she has left,
wherever I go,
I am not there.

ever since she has left,
wherever I go,
I am not there.

like I’m just a shadow
but still standing here,

do you understand?

no!!

miss, I can’t explain this ,
just write the name,
I am absent, miss...

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@earnest stream
@wind rapids

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@normal lance

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@unique pollen
@thin charm

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@slate charm

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chilly lake
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@swift topaz

swift topaz
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The feeling of being lost/isolated shows in this poem. Or at least how I interpret that when she's not around, he doesn't feel present anywhere at all.

Curious about him being called 'roll no. 19'.

I may be overthinking this, but it's as if like there's an exchange of dialogues in this passage:

where are you staring?
are you lost?

miss, that smile is gone

what did you say?
it's gone...

The italicized lines indicate like someone else is speaking it.

Overall, I enjoyed act-reading the poem!

swift topaz
swift topaz
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Shall I ping you then for my other poem in return?

swift topaz
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Also I'll try looking through your older works too

chilly lake
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thankuuu thankuu

unique pollen
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19 is such an odd number

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it feels odder than 39

normal lance
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It's a something new style i have seen today... Indeed great dialogue format poem SaberSaysPretty
Btw... Roll no. 19--? 😭 Sounds weird... Was it ur actually roll no. ?

unique pollen
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it is very emotionally resonant

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but its not a poem in my eyes

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its more of a conversation than a poem, or even a slice of life

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it has all the themes and emotions you want it to have and express

lost drumBOT
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*it has all the themes

and emotions you want it

to have and express*

unique pollen
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but it don't think its a poem

chilly lake
# unique pollen but it don't think its a poem

uhhh so what do you think poetry is?
well it's a dialogue poetry that comes under dramatic poetry..
dialogue poetry is a type of poetry where the poem is written as a conversation between two or more characters..
poetry has different forms it's up to you what you adapt .. that's what i think
poetry is a form through which you can convey your feelings to the readers.. so am not fixed to a specific type you have readed my most of the pieces here so you already know that

violet trenchBOT
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👋 | @chilly lake, Welcome back!

You've been away for 4 hours, 6 minutes and 41 seconds. You missed a lot!!
Your afk status was: eepy

unique pollen
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its still hard to classify into anything. but i'd say as long as it gets the message through, it's alr

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"what do you think poetry is?"
Don't you know hard that is to answer? lol

chilly lake
unique pollen
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sorry about that

wind rapids
normal lance