#Everything was Naught: Abandon(ed:) The Earth.

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rain jasper
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"After the fire, after the rain
After the sacred kissed the profane
When you came and left again
Such a captivating pain
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On that day of eternal's silence
I'd found nothing but detachments
Remnants of belongings,
Shared in revered Chattels,
Made by emblematic matter.
I tried to unearth,
What was to be found in shallow,
Was only found in the core.
The Nameless found in the sacrosanct,
Left behind, to the shattered remains.

Insignificant: Only cogitations of their mind.
Boundless: Vasting infinities in the Psyche.
Cognizance: Only recognizing concrete tangibility.
Material: Of sublunary, (un)recognizable to all.

Substantiated in our minds
Residues of truth,
And those left behind
Sitting in tainted youth

I sought out those streaks of coruscates
Entering through the forest gates
To find an abandoned acreage, rootless
Futile; To find a tree, fruitless

Stumbling across the dirt in blurred reality,
Through endless depictions, colored of shifting tonality.
In vain effort to uncover My neglected ethereal,
Ineffable to creations of the material.

In that sylvan space,
In the wandering Individual.
I found nothing but a place,
A place, to most, unbridgeable.

Proven only by vestige.
Remnants of an old message,
Those ashes remain in sacred soil,
To be spread on the ropes of a larger coil.

rare jetty
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hi! can i ask about rhyme scheme? It appears that some stanzas have them while others (or at least portions of others) dont? was that intentional?

rain jasper
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It was

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The 2 first parts were meant to be something without a rhyme scheme

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Then the actual poem starts

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@rare jetty ^

rare jetty
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i might recommend either writing in a more committing to a more dedicated rhyme scheme, cutting loose and just going free verse, or making a more clear distinction between verses that do or don't have a rhyme scheme.

rain jasper
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It's meant to be this way though. Why? I can't entirely explain that, but it feel's right and resonates with me

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Think of it like an intro

neat timberBOT
rain jasper
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lets goooo

rare jetty
rain jasper