Butterflies' Echoes

[craggy leaf]

The damned butterflies oft dross'd opal,
doust thou sing arias oft echoing hearts?
As maiden's grace, trapped inst' nobal
descents, unescaping thy fatest' start,
art non' wings shine thousand couple
oft many lights, blinding ecstacy's part.

Pure'st oft leaping near heaven's skies,
lest muddied scars break thy soft, pale
temperate' softness, thy grail implies
thou, an eternal love, art doust unveil
three rebirths, three world, three lives.

@drowsy saddle @boreal fable @dire quartz @worldly orbit

@wraith linden @feral drum @dense swift @dense swift

[formal nest]

interesting, curious as to your use of apostrophes - what's the reasoning behind " temperate' ", for example?

[craggy leaf]

Restraint softness

[drowsy saddle]

Nice poem, I like it:)

[feral drum]

is this eliteration? @craggy leaf

[craggy leaf]

Eliteration?

[feral drum]

aliteration@?

[craggy leaf]

There are some Aliterations

[feral drum]

Idk if thats the name of this specific technique but I've seen a style that takes the e's out of words

and replace them with '

I forgot the name but violet showed me it I believe

@forest zephyr

I never remebered the requirement to it or how to implicate it properly

[craggy leaf]

[dire quartz]

nice poem beautiful imagery

[dense swift]

Fascinating how you, through the butterfly, have converted the normative notions that resonate about introspective weight and life. In the figure of this insect, you've been able to make its beauty not only seen visually.

The interpretation I had here was a contemplative dilation on what makes up the small seconds in which we allow ourselves to see the flapping of a butterfly's wings: one so vulnerable, but still vivid, still alive.

I wouldn't complain if you tried to expand on the structure and experiment with something new from the same poem. What do you think about trying to make a sextina with the butterfly as the central element?

[craggy leaf]

Ooooh, whats a sestina

[dense swift]

It's a poetic structure -- Ezra Pound and Dante Alighieri are the most famous authors to have composed it too -- consisting of six stanzas with six verses each, concluding with a three-line ballad.

This ballad - or if you prefer, an envoi -- contains six words each and sometimes doesn't require rhymes. It's a very different way of telling a poem, but it's too complex for me to explain linearly.

Whether they like it or not, lovers of this form need to recognize that it has been lost in time. I'll send you two links: one containing “Sestina: Altaforte” and the other a site that would explain it better than I could.

[dense swift]

https://www.masterclass.com/articles/sestina-poem-form
https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems/53967/sestina-altaforte

[craggy leaf]

Got it! ill try