#A garden of you

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sweet oak
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With every thought of you
With every sight of you
A flower blooms within me
For I am a garden of you

Your smile the sunshine I adore
Your voice the summer rain I crave

Your eyes the morning dew
That keeps me nourished
Your love the fertile soil
That keeps me flourished
For I am a garden made of you

You are electricity
That lights my world
In your absence it's left dim

You are the north star
That guides me the way
In your absence I'm lost

You are the flame
And I'm a monsoon moth
In your absence I'm unborn

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@merry storm

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@rare pecan

inland orchid
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It's so good .. gud work 🎉

sweet oak
inland orchid
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Buddy I am new to this platform.. so I wrote a lot of poems so how can I get a review out of it ?

sweet oak
gaunt cometBOT
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*Post it in post-own

copy the link and post in

poetry feedback*

- aetheragosti
inland orchid
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Ok thank you ☺️

sweet oak
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@compact thunder

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@wraith oyster

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@grim canopy

rare pecan
sweet oak
hushed path
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last line and the hook ‘I am a garden of you’ are both killer, bravo

I feel the tone may be a little too even throughout? would have liked to see more of a journey, maybe some more twists and turns?

thanks for posting, enjoyed reading

sweet oak
sweet oak
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@cerulean comet

merry storm
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ayyy im so sorry for the late response but this is hella amazing!! i can't even describe it. just so good!!