copy

[hushed lily]

The path beyond the wall
Is shrouded in fog
Your heart will lead the way
And reveal the route for today

Your just an echo
A copy of what others says
You follow their lead
Hidden behind a smile

Your not original
No matter what others say
Your a copy
A puppet being played

[clear compass]

Nice poem!

[proven halo]

the choice of words is amazing

[hushed lily]

ty, ty!

[clear compass]

Yw:)

[vale zephyr]

Is the choice of words "Your" and "and" in verse 2 line 1 and "Your"s in verse 3 deliberate? If so it's an interesting choice in which i see some meaning.

[hushed lily]

and was posed be to an oops

but the your's are deliberate yes

[vale zephyr]

I see. Probably not what you ment with them, but I'm thinking about the "Your"s being somewhat a hint to what a copy is - despite seeming and sounding correct, there is still something wrong with it. Although a small mistake, it is enough to show the fakeness of the person

[hushed lily]

i dont usually write my poems with a meaning, i write them so they can be interpretated in different ways but this one does have a meaning. the meaning is i am but a copy of my mother, she is only just controlling me and i hide the pains away with a smile, and "the path behind the wall" and "and reveal the route for today" is showing that beyond my house during the day my heart and intiuiton will lead me the right way that day

but poems mean different things to different ppl

[vale zephyr]

I see. And the meanings of the "Your"s?

[hushed lily]

its like im talking to myself, liking im saying this to me

[hushed lily]

can i get ur feedback on my other poems? you seem to have interesting insight and takes

[vale zephyr]

Sure! Will take a look at a few tomorrow

[hushed lily]

ty! ill tag you in a few as well

[hushed lily]

can i also dm a poem to you? i just made it but its techinically in different "langauges" so i cant post in the server but id like some feedback on it, i was experimenting a bit in style with it

[vale zephyr]

Sure, go ahead