Fragments of a shattered Psyche

[chilly forum]

@late musk
@gentle oasis
@candid bear
@rich parcel
@twin wasp

Apologies for the ping Alvester I made edits and wanted it on a separate channel, you don't have to reply if you don't want to

@pseudo wave
@proud wolf
@tame adder
@unkempt basin
@bold agate

[oak trout]

I want to cry. This speaks to me in a way that no other poem has ever spoken before. Great job, and keep on writing!

[chilly forum]

I really appreciate your feedback. I'm glad the poem resonates with you on that level and I hope you find comfort in it

@sonic goblet

[sonic goblet]

poems like this are my favorite types of poems. This poem speaks to me and I love it! I love your word choice to. I would Love to read more of your works 😌

[chilly forum]

I appreciate the feedback and I'll be sure to ping you in my future post 😄

[late musk]

Nice edits! The poem flows more smoothly! The title definitely emped up the entirety of the poem. I enjoy reading your narratives and seeing you use your enjambments!

Ping me all you want. Lmk if you need any specific feedback anytime!

[chilly forum]

Thank you for all the help and feedback you've given me

I definetly have an affinity for darker poems

[late musk]

Me too

[chilly forum]

I'd love to read some of yours in the future, maybe it'll inspire me

[late musk]

Ill ping in u for some 🙂

[chilly forum]

Thank you so much

[twilit bridge]

This poem is so good! It got the idea across well and I really like the emphasis you put on the word shattering and how you changed the format of the poem for that part! It adds alot to the poem and it's concept. I also like how you emphasized the "Right" at the end, it also adds alot to the poem. Overall i think you expressed the idea of a fragmented/shattered psyche really well! This is really good:)

Also unrelated to the poem but I love your profile Pic, I love ddlc lol:)

[chilly forum]

Your feedback is spot on. DDLC is the game that got me into poetry and I have sociopathy so this pfp really reasonates with me

The words are kind of small but my Monika is saying "I have sociopathy" In the picture

[unreal mesa]

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[vagrant spoke]

#maybeyouwouldfeelalotbetterifgothelp #&othersbesafer

[chilly forum]

If I got help my poetry wouldn't be as good 😛

[vagrant spoke]

It would be helpful for the “others” to live safer. Less contaminated etc, etc 🥺

U did it again.

Back to spring madness all over. Have not done or said anything. Busy work

[chilly forum]

Hm?

[vagrant spoke]

Kid involved. Pls

U know what is right & what is wrong. Stay inside the lanes.

[chilly forum]

What do you happen to be on about?

[chilly forum]

For new readers

^ The poem

[twilit bridge]

Ddlc is genuinley such a good game I love it. Monika was my favorite lol.

[twilit bridge]

Lol I was trying to read it but couldn't tell what it said so thanks!

[cursive owl]

*Lol I was trying

to read it but couldn't tell

what it said so thanks!*

- armoagene

[chilly forum]

My style of poetry is heavily influenced by Monika's style

I wrote a poem of me trying to use her style and it came out pretty well

[twilit bridge]

That's cool!

[chilly forum]

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1288257800669106268

[twilit bridge]

Nice

I'll check that out

[chilly forum]

I hope you enjoy it

[twilit bridge]

I just read it and I enjoyed it alot!

It was really good

[chilly forum]

I'm glad 😄

[twilit bridge]

🙂

[vagrant spoke]

Is she saying she has it, or that you have it lol..?

[lost mica]

Wonderful! @vagrant spoke has just pregressed to level 2!

[chilly forum]

She has it

But I also have it which is why I relate to the character