loyal hound

[jaunty cliff]

Loyal Hound

Alone I sit, Alone I wait
I wait for my owner to feed me
to feed me attention that I so desperately need
I wait to be showered with love, but my owner won't come
for he is a cowered.

Alone I sit, Alone I wait
I wait to be taken out on a walk with my owner
to be walked for hours with no reason why
I wait to be called by my name
to be called to come to be by their side

Alone I sit, Alone I wait
I wait to be heard
to have my owner hear my whimpers and cries
I wait for him to arrive
to comfort me, reassure me and be by MY side

Alone I sit, Alone I wait
I wait for days, weeks even years for my owner to come see me
to open the door and expose me to the light
I wait to be set free
to wait for my owner to loosen my collar that's on me too tight

Alone I sit, Alone I wait
I wait as I slowly rot and wither away in this dark, empty room
to stare out the window and look at the moon
I wait to be thrown away or put down
to be put down for making too much sound

Alone I sit, Alone I wait
I wait and I wait and I wait
I wait until I tear apart and break
I wait for an owner, one I know won't return
to wait for their gentle voice and bitter-sweet words, those that I yearn

Alone I sit, Alone I wait
I wait just to be met with another dead end
to wait patiently through this abuse, until my owner makes amends
I wait as Im held back by my chains
to sit here, cold, hungry and in pain

Alone,
all alone
I lay on the stone cold floor, in this old houses Lobby
Maggots, flies and ants crawl all over my body
14 days I wait to be found
I watch as my owner comes in with shock on his face, standing over my corpse sobbing
I died with the curse of being a loyal hound
And they've only realized what they have done until now.

And for some reason it deleted some words so, behind desperately there is a “need”

[dapper gulch]

@winged reef @devout smelt @hot oriole

@potent oar @rich aurora @devout smelt @amber summit @visual cedar

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[jaunty cliff]

I rewrote it I’ll send it later

[winged reef]

Loyal through the pain,

Even when love turns away,

It’s never a curse.

[exotic sable]

*Loyal through the pain,

Even when love turns away,

It’s never a curse.*

- The Ethereal Bard

[jaunty cliff]

Well in my case it wad a curse seeing broski cheated on me 🤪

[winged reef]

Nope it’s not

[jaunty cliff]

In the moment it feels like a curse but being loyal is a big blessing granted

Before I send the rewritten one I want to mention beforehand that;
Loyalty is very hard to keep
But once youre loyal you won’t stop being loyal.
But until the one you were staying loyal for cheats on you it feels like a curse.
Why?
Because you find it hard to leave
You are so deeply rooted you cant get yourself out. So the longer you stay and be loyal it will eventually hurt you very badly.
Thats what I meant with curse

If you are loyal
You are strong
Just know your boundaries and limits.

[dapper gulch]

No no it is.

If one is loyal to a fault (which is the theme of this piece)
It can become a curse when your partner becomes disloyal.

Essentially it's the curse of not being able to separate from a toxic relationship / betrayal due to being overly loyal or loyal to a fault.

[jaunty cliff]

Yes ty for saying that better for me 🙏

[winged reef]

Being loyal is not synonymous with being in a toxic relationship. Loyalty is inherent to a person’s character, it is not relationship specific.

If you find yourself in an uncomfortable relationship (toxic) it simply means you choose not to have an affair; this reflects loyalty, but it does not mean you can’t end the relationship, isn’t it ?

[dapper gulch]

Bro.

Ur missing the point

[winged reef]

🤔

[dapper gulch]

It's not about loyalty from the betrayers POV but from the betrayed.

The struggle of wanting to get away from an obviously damaging situation versus the strong built up loyalty to the person who is hurting you.

[winged reef]

Built up loyalty??

[dapper gulch]

The dichotomy of needing to leave and wanting to stay

[winged reef]

You can build affection but not loyalty dear

It’s in nature either the person is loyal or not ..there is no middle ground here lol

[dapper gulch]

Bro, are you loyal to your bank teller?
Or your grocier?
No.

You are loyal to your close friends and lovers.
To those you built close relationships with.

Also respectfully don't call me dear.
It's a bit of a trigger for me.

❤

And when those close relationships, those who you are loyal to, hurt you or betray you, it is devastating because now they have broken their loyalty to you.
And now one has to struggle with leaving or staying.
Hence the dichotomy of loyalty to a fault or self preservation

[winged reef]

Yes if that’s my nature I’m loyal to everyone even the grocier…it’s like being kind ..you can’t be kind to a level of specificity if you are kind then you are kind to your kid & some stranger on the street as well, distinctiction means you are acting kind or loyal (otherwise known as faking it)

[dapper gulch]

My brother in Christ.

People aren't pictures they are processes.

Loyalty can be broken and developed

Found and lost

Not staticly felt.

[winged reef]

Trust can be broken

You can’t broke loyalty

[winged reef]

Exactly

Maybe you don’t know the diff 🤷🏻‍♂️

[dapper gulch]

My friend.
I think this piece might be out of your range of view

Respectfully ofc

[dapper gulch]

I think you might not have the experience to know the difference....

@iron frost

@timid igloo

@stray path

@regal goblet

[potent oar]

"I wait as I'm held back by my chains
To sit here, cold, hungry and in pain

Alone all alone
I lay on the stone cold floor, in this old houses lobby
Maggots, flies and ants crawl all over my body
14 days I wait to be found"

DAMNNNN DUDE, your Imagery and evocation of emotion and desperation I am very much in love with

10/10 very solidly great piece

[potent oar]

Keep up the great writing

[jaunty cliff]

Tysm

[jaunty cliff]

Oh and Sofia, im pines sister btw

[potent oar]

Oh hello, very cool to meet you in this round about way

[visual cedar]

Alone I sit, Alone I wait
I wait as I slowly rot and wither away in this dark, empty room
to stare out the window and look at the moon
I wait to be thrown away or put down
to be put down for making too much sound I really like this stanza and the repetition of "Alone I sit, Alone I wait" emphasizes the theme of the poem

[jaunty cliff]

Ty

[devout smelt]

Wow this one hits really hard, I like this
"I died with the curse of being a loyal hound"
Amazing line, hits hard

Sorry for being late life is a little hectic

[devout smelt]

The repetition is also awesome

[jaunty cliff]

Ty

[jaunty cliff]

@late valve

[late valve]

Omg

It’s so good

Legit I love the repetition, the fact that each stanza follows the same structure

The last one differs a bit

But I think that’s fitting

I like how gruesome it is - very fitting

Good imageries and rhyme ahhhhhhhhh

It’s rly good

[jaunty cliff]

Thank you 🫶🫶🫶

idk any fancy big words so I stick to basic ones

Or those i know of

[late valve]

Personally I do the same, I feel like you don’t need fancy words to make something well written

[jaunty cliff]

Yk what inspired it?

[late valve]

Do tell

[jaunty cliff]

1. someone being disloyal to me and 2. a Minecraft dog

BC BRO THEYRE SO SADDDD

[late valve]

Ahahah I love it

[jaunty cliff]

they just waiitttt

😿

[late valve]

Trauma = best inspo for poetry

[jaunty cliff]

Absolutely

[late valve]

Maybee that’s why I’ve haven’t been able to write something in a while lol

I wrote a poem very similar to this

Not in terms of theme

[jaunty cliff]

Fr?

[late valve]

But structure

[jaunty cliff]

TAG MEEEE

[late valve]

Yeah

But it’s so dark

;-;

[jaunty cliff]

We love that

Hand it over

[late valve]

Wellll when I look back on it

It’s kinda cringey

I’ll DM u the link

[jaunty cliff]

Okayy