The Call of Evenfall

[crude cargo]

@upper helm

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Off the bat, a very common title, but I'll get to reading :>

[crude cargo]

Yeah I probably prefer the original title "The Night's Ballroom", but a friend thought this one better

Many of the lines are actually from poems that I scrapped, repurposed to fit in here. The start is word for word from the original version of The Night's Ballroom.

But after I posed the last ones that you and Rosey read, I finally got some real inspiration to write something other than a short lil song after almost a year or so and kinda went overboard

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I'm left speechless —

This is such a pleasant read indeed, literally flowed so seamlessly.
The rhymes are so clever and I love how the words within lines also rhyme.
It seems so professional, you certainly have got words to your tongue.

I'm amazed
Well done ✨💜

[crude cargo]

🥹

I wholly expected worse than that I'm gonna be honest

I keep finding little things with it I'm not happy with every few minutes

There's probably been over 100 changes just in the past 3 hours tbh

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It's honestly perfect the way it is
But if you feel contempt with it
Then it's your choice to edit
Just don't let your search for mistakes create more

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Understandable, I usually make a lot of changes in my longer poems

[crude cargo]

Thank you for reading btw, truly

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You better thank me, it's bloody 1:42 am rn 😭 and that was a long read
But i enjoyed it, ty for sharing it ✨💜

[crude cargo]

If there's anything you'd like me to read, do let me know. I'm not the greatest at feedback but I can return the favor and just be another set of eyes

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Wonderful! @crude cargo has just pregressed to level 4!

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Welllll, since you showed me this long work of yours, I'll ping you in one of my more lengthy poems as well :>