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mental wadi
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copper cape
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i searched for him in gilded halls,

where whispered prayers kissed marble walls,

but found no trace of heaven’s grace

in solemn words or saintly face. Wow 😭 😭 🙏

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nice poem as always and i love the theme u went with

teal pine
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The last two stanza ❤️ ! I love the idea and the execution honestly

blazing kraken
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Ooo this is a pretty good poem and interesting idea

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I love this one , you did an amazing job on this poem

mental wadi
mental wadi
mental wadi
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sleek saddle
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this feels like a deeply personal reflection, almost like a quiet rebellion against everything we’ve been told about where to find meaning. and the way i relate to this hurts 😭

the way you describe god as maybe being in the silence or the space between words really resonated with me. its like you’re saying that maybe we’re looking too hard, or in the wrong places, and that uncertainty feels really relatable. the visual echoes you wrote out were such a clever touch, like the feeling of being stuck in a loop, searching for something that might not even be there.

overall, this is beautiful in its vulnerability. youre not afraid to admit the confusion, and that’s what makes it so powerful.

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harsh lake
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I really like this one. Strong poem with good sound, flowing logically and well with anecdotes that all fit the greater narrative. Nice spacing and typography, creative use of round. I think the weakest part of it is from 'even in forbidden bars' to '& broken bottles' - it loses cadence and sound here, becoming sparse and having a different tone to the rest of the poem. While the topic is also about deprivation, I found the similitude of topic and wording to diverge too strongly from the poem as a whole and imo it would be better to keep a similar style here that emphasizes deprivation instead of being deprived itself.

mental wadi
mental wadi
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🤔

sleek saddle
nova dagger
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What if he is the silence that follows the noise, or the space between words when we stop asking?

This part is wonderful; this questioning with an air of supposition shows how we are always searching for answers, clear signs, waiting for God or whatever it is to give us an obvious light. But the speaker brings this idea that maybe the secret lies in the emptiness, in the silence that comes when we stop questioning so much. It makes total sense because it's such a mature perspective that no one really stops to think about, and at the same time, it's simple: sometimes, peace and answers are found in what is not said, in what does not appear. It’s as if the speaker is saying that the true encounter happens when we stop searching so frantically and just let things be.
Nice poem!!! SaberSaysPretty

delicate trout
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This poem is so good!

spring osprey
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what if he is the silence

that follows the noise,

or the space between words

when we stop asking ?

this part reminds me of how silence has a voice and no voice at the same time, it also reminds me about hmmm, well how some people can blindly believe, others can see, others are deaf and others are blind but in truth we will never know if there is a God but only until we actually die. It's cuddle me pink, I think you possibly remember me through my poems?

mental wadi
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