#Unwavering love

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muted herald
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She's little miss overthinker
Always wondering who will love her;
Insecurities about her looks she bears
While a man deeply in love with her
Wants to confess his feeling so true;
But fear of rejection his heart feeling blue;
Obsessed with her his love feels apart;
She call herself ugly, he sees beauty unsurpassed;

She's overthinker yet he's overexplainer;
She's believes no one will her forever love yet he's the one who will never cease to prove;
She dressed, he adores;
She cares, he loves;
She's the one who he cherish his true love;
A kind of love we all want in our life;
A pair fitted like a hand in glove;

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@pliant heart how is this?😅

versed coral
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Oh nice one

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Make it more sad

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If I have to suggest something

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Make it more orderly
And also make it more blue or something

muted herald
versed coral
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Little lady is an overthinker
She ponders who her love is
Her fears of her own imperfections
Keep on killing her from inside

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There is a man who loves the lady
Would love to open his heart
But he fears that his little heart
Would be speared by the little lady

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Something like this

muted herald
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versed coral
muted herald
pliant heart
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I liked this poem 🙂

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You've improved a lot!

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There are only two minor mistakes I'd like to point out

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"She's the one who cherishes his true love"

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And "she dresses, he adores"

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You accidentally wrote "dressed"

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But that's it, really

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You did a really wonderful job here 🙂