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plucky niche
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This is stunning and I felt it's such a calm and almost relaxing read and just allows you to feel like you're really there.. beautifully written truly 👏

charred kiln
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@stiff raptor

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@silk onyx

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@balmy ingot

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@astral wolf

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@calm tiger

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@velvet current

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@rose cedar

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@quiet gulch

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@rich hemlock

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@fast talon

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@night meteor

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@faint forge

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@robust flame

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@stable bough

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@real otter

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@quiet pond

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@tight fjord

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@rocky pumice

crimson moth
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I love this <3.

real otter
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Ooooo I love this one a lot! Its really pretty!

calm tiger
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we were soaked to the bone,

barefoot on the backdrop,

where the city bleeds rain.

there was no music, Wow soo good 😭

indigo pike
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hi! really pretty imagery here. theres a ghostly feeling to it. i think if you played around a bit more by varying the syntax here and there the poem would be even better.

Sorry if this is nitpicky, i think something along the lines of
“barefoot against the backdrop / of the city that bleeds rain (or of a city bleeding rain)” would sound smoother.

third stanza starts off pretty strong, though i think it gets redundant after “we are not in love” maybe talk about the compare the storm to the girl(?), bring her to life through it

charred kiln
charred kiln
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@lusty dawn

rocky pumice
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love this one ❤️

tropic nebula
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This is too good fr😭😭❤️

charred kiln