Lucifer's Lullaby

[dense dune]

"Oh my sweet darling."
"Where the willows blow and the mountains hide."
"Sorrow will come."
"Into a broken dead heart."
"Ne'er to return again."
"An angels cry."
"Tears stained red in the sun."
"Golden flowers bloom and greed sings your name."
"Lust will come and go"
"Oh, will you reign."
"The evil has come."
"May angels weep."
"May devils creep."
"Sounds go bump at night."
"They are your shadows."
"No such thing as pure or light."
"There is no such thing as fools gold."
"Only one's agony is where the fools go,"
"It is where the angels fear to go."
"In a sorrowful grave of dancing souls."
"The torture calls to you."
"Tortures and screams are to be heard."
"Oh my love, I am your mother."
"It is I who knows what is best."
"You will be the next king."
"For this is Lucifer's Lullaby."
"For you are his son."
"May the angels weep and never shine."
"This is my lullaby."
"To you."
"My king."

[void totem]

mkay

religious

idk anything i actually was the worst person to ask to see this

[dense dune]

Lmao

@lean sentinel @barren leaf @frank quest @hoary mason @void totem

@ebon wharf

[frank quest]

Aha a poem

I’ll get to feedback soon

[dense dune]

Okay thanks

[lean sentinel]

UHUM UHUM

READING

[frank quest]

Gotta go do a thing but later imma definitely drop by again cause COOL TITLE

[dense dune]

Thank you

Its not the best

I couldn't pinpoint the song so I'll be redoing another one

[lean sentinel]

UHUUUUUM I LOVE IT

I THE WROST PEOPLE IN REVIEWS

BUT

I CAN SAY ITS A GOOD POEM!

[dense dune]

Lmao its fine

[lean sentinel]

IN THE PERSPECTIVE

[dense dune]

Thank you for your time

[lean sentinel]

YEAH I LIKE IT A LOT! NICE POEM Chirshelle!

[dense dune]

@grim dove

[grim dove]

Very interesting poem! The references to hell and Satan give the poem quite a dark yet fascinating aura. I like the language utilised! You did an amazing job!! Keep it up! 😄❤️

What made you want to show the poem to me specifically?

Just out of curiosity

[dense dune]

Because we talk alot

I'm only tagging people who I know

[grim dove]

And that's great!

People tend to make the mistake of just tagging anyone and everyone

[hoary mason]

oh hello

this poem is fantastic

[dense dune]

Thank you ✨

[void totem]

Nice poem!

[dense dune]

Thank you

[magic berry]

i like the themes/narrative of this a lot. not sure if its your style, but the quotation marks being a constant & the stiff punctuation make this kind of a flat read. the audience doesnt have context on who is exactly speaking, and why they are speaking at all—who is the speaker in this?
i think you would benefit from reading this out loud and hearing where it sounds awkward. id love to read a workshopped version of this :]

[ebon wharf]

Wonderful poem, thats a nice title too

[dense dune]

Thank you

[dense dune]

@manic zinc

[dense dune]

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