car window

[steep leaf]

Car window

When you glance out of that portal,

Believe that you’re immortal!

For you observe beyond good and evil,

And judge the constructions made of people;

Undoubtedly making you question your path of moral.

-D.F.

this is kind of a lazy one, i was very uninspired when I wrote this. So I won't be tagging a lot of people hahah

@eager hearth @vocal scaffold @fringe spear @thin lion

[stone verge]

I adore the lines “judge the constructions of people” extremely satisfying wording. That lets the mind fill in the blanks. The flow of the poem is really nice as well. Keep up the fantastic work :))

[raw zinc]

This is sooo good

[steep leaf]

Thank you! I chose the phrasing ''judge the constructions made OF people'' because I think that when people build something (streets, huts, etc), they always leave a part of themselves in those things, hence why ''of'' people and not ''by'' people haha Thank u so much!

[steep leaf]

Thank you love!!

[fringe spear]

That's a thought-provoking perspective. The car window can indeed be a portal to a world beyond our immediate surroundings. It's a place where we can observe the world without being directly involved, allowing us to reflect on our own place in it.

[eager hearth]

Ok nice short poem, I like the flow of it

[thin lion]

Lazy poem or not it's still a good one! Really reflects on a person's creativity when in a car ride. Do you think you could write this as a haiku? Could be for practice and fun no pressure

[steep leaf]

Exactly! Fun fact: I thought of this idea when I was actually looking out the car window, haha.

[steep leaf]

Thank you!!

[steep leaf]

Thank you so much! Such a good idea, I will definitely try; even though this will be challenging 😄 If I make it I will definitely tag you! Thanks for your idea (:

[thin lion]

You can do it!

[vocal scaffold]

Look, don't even worry about your indignation when it comes to your poem. Although it was made in a state of [apparent] apathy, it is still rich in its own representation.

I think that even though it could be taken as a literal construction of a window, it could just be a representation of various other simbologies - about life, about dying, etc..