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This is lowkey seductive 💀💀💀
It's giving "billionaire alpha male mafia gang leader model" and I love the vibe of confidence you've given it
The poem also sounds like a breakaway of sorts, or perhaps suggesting that the person sees past the charms unlike everyone else
I love the last three lines too 🤭🤭
My only suggestion is a minor one, which is to change
"Petals fall, colors turn dull" to "Petals fall, colors dull"
Js makes it sound better in that small part, but still an amazing poem overall!
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bard slain!
Do not waste your breath on this argument,
my dear—
you will surely lose.
WHAAAAAAAAt
NICE ONE
magic parrot
This makes me think about myself I yearn for a double glance because in the store I would look at all these pretty girls and say to myself "Am I not as beautiful as them?" I never thought that some of those girls who are as beautiful as arrogant will never recognize true love or friendship because they think they are beautiful then anyone else. While that is bad it is good to have self confidence in oneself. In time beauty will fade and what's inside will only be left. To think I want to be as beautiful as them I didn't think of all the consequences or things that will come with it. This gave me a teachable moment. Thank you. Your poem is absoulutely superb. ✨
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this poem really captures the harsh reality of how beauty is just superficial. its almost like a challenge to someone who thinks their looks can carry them through life, but you’re here to remind them that substance and truth are what really matters. same goes for the beauty standards that exist in the society; they are not going to take anyone anywhere in life. also the way you contrast beauty with time, calling it a "relentless bastard," adds a raw, unapologetic edge. its like you're peeling back layers and demanding to see what's real and thats really powerful
great job!
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This is lowkey seductive 💀💀💀
It's giving "billionaire alpha male mafia gang l...
Damn 😯, thank you so much🫡
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This makes me think about myself I yearn for a double glance because in the stor...
Believe me, you do not want the gaze of 50 admirers—
it may seem thrilling, but the novelty will fade & emptiness starts to sets in when you realize those guys will cast the same glances at any passing beauty. What truly matters is the gaze of that one guy who sees only you, whose eyes cannot help but linger.
Seek depth, not the fleeting allure of the crowd.
Good luck, & thank you so much for taking the time to read my poem.😊
tardy ridge
Ferrari mentioned 🗣️🇮🇹
Great poem as always!!!
wicked fable
Petals fall, colours turn dull,
& time is a relentless bastard,
it does not care if you are the fairest of them all.
no matter how gorgeous you are, time will take it all away. It's like a slap in the face to anyone who thinks beauty will last forever. The way the poem demystifies beauty and puts it in its place is incredible. It makes us realize that, in the end, what really matters are the words and the deep feelings. It's a powerful reminder that true substance will always trump the superficial.
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*Petals fall, colours turn dull,
& time is a relentless bastard,
it does not car...
Exactly, thank you so much for reading my poem. 😊
mossy matrix
Good poem well written !!!
hollow tartan
I love this!!
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north moss
Great poem! You chose a nice topic and stressed it in a very nice way!!!
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Great poem! You chose a nice topic and stressed it in a very nice way!!!
Thank you so much 😊
hearty snow
I love this , and the meaning of it !
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