toska

[balmy tapir]

this feels familiar... hmmmm

hehehe

uwu

lemme read em now

not sure if ill give sufficient feedback tho

am quite eepy

[nova totem]

I collect rainwater in the crater of my stomach
Prescribed starlight
Perfidy of asteroids🔥🔥🔥

It's such an enthralling piece, amazingly done!

[prime fulcrum]

*Ahah those are all

random word combos I thought

of in the shower*

- _rainbowesque

[stable void]

I will read this in a while okieew?

[stable void]

@tranquil crow This is probably my first time reading your work and I love it so much I might offer you a cookie soo offers a cookie

[boreal walrus]

God, this is really nice! I love the vocabulary utilised here, it's so interesting. The third and last stanzas are my favorite. You did a phenomenal job!! 🙂

[rancid drift]

the enjambment here is so well done omg nice poem :3

[sudden elbow]

This is amazing rainbow! I loved reading this really!!

[wicked karma]

While the pacing is great and the imagery is stunning, the poem could benefit from a more economical use of words. Stripping it down to its core would transform this beautiful piece into a poetic ode, enhancing its impact and clarity.

[tranquil crow]

Thanks for the compliments and your opinion. I see your point about the words.
However the almost excessive use of details is intentional — it is not really supposed to be clear at all. I mostly wrote random lines that sounded pretty to me, then assembled it into a poem 🥲

[steady kestrel]

@tranquil crow It was really good expressing poem ! But I think u can use more extensive vocab

And why u deleted it ?

[tranquil crow]

I didn’t delete it on purpose 😭

I got banned and it autodeleted

[steady kestrel]

Omg why u got banned ?

💀

My poems also got deleted when I got banned

[tranquil crow]

accident

the mod banned the wrong ID 😭😭😭

they kicked me instead of the lerson they were going for

[steady kestrel]

Lmao