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oak blaze
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@frigid yacht

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@rocky creek

worldly rain
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I've been trying to keep up with these notifications but I've been busy 😭 other than that, I really love this work. Good job! 😁

short acorn
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It reads so well, i had a blues tune running in my head while i read it. good job,bard. you justify your name.

oak blaze
livid vale
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Bard poem its my nre religion

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@fleet whale

fleet whale
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Ohh, okay. I see what you mean about repetitiveness, but no importance to the poem. Here, the repeated phrase “What more is there to say?” DOES contribute to the writing. I see, I see takes notes

Favorite lines:
Problem. I cannot choose a favorite line, because every basically line is my favorite 😍

What more is there to say?

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fleet whale
frigid yacht
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||Attachment issues|| in a nutshell??

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Jokes aside, I loved it!

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frigid yacht
tender bay
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I like how the title of your poem stands out so perfectly. As in I can "find" it in the poem itself.
The words are very relatable to be honest. I love it.

oak blaze
oak blaze
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@harsh flame

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@dark skiff

dark skiff
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Ok this a good poem, nice job

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@formal spire

harsh flame
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This also seems very personal. I liked this poem.
I liked that you picked free verse but I found the constant continuation of "What more is there to say ?" not so right. you couldve written that at the end of the poem if you wanted to aim for a more distinct impact. but thats just my opinion.
This poem talks about two lovers... the speaker being the one thats the unfortunate one. It speaks about a wicked lover that seemingly plays with its feelings but yet keeps it close, the speaker still desperate for its lovers attention (wether it would be affection or something else). It seems that the speaker suffers from unrequited love, understanding that its lover is not good to itself, but the speaker still cant bring himself not to love its partner.
I also liked the structure of this poem - even more than https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1273634515146768417 's

west oak
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I absolutely love this , probably one of my favorites from all your writings, I might note it down in my journal... but rest assured I will give credits <<3 🩷🩷

oak blaze
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@dawn orchid

alpine wigeon
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This is haunting

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Would it be okay if I used these as lyrics when writing a song?

vale merlinBOT
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*Would it be okay

if I used these as lyrics

when writing a song?*

- Heartstrings.
oak blaze