#An Incessant Journey

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tidal bough
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@keen wagon
@flint lotus

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@final pine
@coral kettle
@normal mountain
@vardomc.#0000

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@lyric grotto

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@past prism

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@visual aspen

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@mental dawn

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@vast mural

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tidal bough
mental dawn
# tidal bough

Umm, this piece is like a tightrope walker, delicately balanced between peaks of emotion & valleys of despair. Imagery is vivid, yet it seems to lose its footing as it traverses the fine line between clarity & complexity.

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While the tension of the journey is felt….the destination remains elusive, as if the poem never quite decides where it wants to land.

tidal bough
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Thank you for your great analysis! I am glad you understand the poem

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This is a very different poem to the poetry I usually right, it is very personal, and for the first time I feel like I have wrote a poem truly to just evoke my feelings

normal mountain
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Stanza breaks 🥲

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I will read this in a little bit when I'm not in fire gear, but good to see you're still around!

tidal bough
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I don't think I tell you how much I love your words! The imagery you've used to sluice over the emotion and raw-ness of this poem is so beautiful and painful at the same time. This is different from your usual poetries, I see that. It has a more colloquial tone to it and YET you've executed it so well!

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Aww thank you so much Jane! I am really glad that you liked this one as it differs as you said to my other poems. I am really glad you like the word choices and the imagery! I had to think really hard with this one, the entire poem is an extended metaphor of the facial expression of the lips. And how the shape of the lips creates a journey, creates an experience for the speaker’s emotions and state. Being symbolic of happiness, sadness and neutral acceptance. And how there is suffering in all of them

lyric grotto
tidal bough
final pine