#For those who loved

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sacred linden
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*I'm still the same lovesick fool,
I think when we're in love,
we're not able
to make good decisions.

For those who loved
and lost everything in a single night,
it's hard to say, some take flight,
hiding behind something out of sight.
Others accept and move on,
others shy away from love, withdrawn.
Some grow immense sadness inside,
others let hatred be their guide.
While a few, in their gloomy despair,
just feel the need to break everything there,
taking out what wasn’t love,
in poetry, a painful shove.

Antipathetic feeling,
bitterness from this drink,
I don’t know, it seems the color’s shrinking,
and the end has begun, the words are sinking.
The poetry begins to fade,
I don’t know what to write,
in truth, I don’t know what to feel,
I’m usually loving,
enough to be a fool, so real.

But maybe being a fool has its worth,
for in love's folly, there's warmth on this earth.
Even when the world turns dark and cold,
the heart persists, refuses to fold.
In poetry, I find refuge and peace,
where words heal what love can’t release.
And as time goes by and the pain subsides,
I keep writing, nourishing what inside resides.*

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manic raft
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AMAZING WORK RICO (I came quick hehe)

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# sacred linden *I'm still the same lovesick fool, I think when we're in love, we're not abl...

I enjoy the diversity in structure, the rhythm and rhymes, but I fin the diction and creativity in word use lacking somewhat for me - but that may appeal to certain audiences. I think this kind of poetry will appeal to a wide demographic, but for me personally I'd like to read things that feature multiple entredres, rich word choices, novel (but harmonic) typography and more: this hits the spot for some of that.

I think this would do rather well with spoken word, but I feel for some contemporary journals you may want to try to elevate the language. I recommend reading more! And especially reading contemporary journals if publishing is your goal ❤️ that'll teach you where to submit! I'll be happy to answer some questions, but I want to offer quick feedack.

Keep writing! I loved the poem and how authentic it was - thanks for sharing ❤️

stiff jungle
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second and last stanza 🙌🤧

wary lynx
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I love this!!

royal mica
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Whoa ricooo. Pretty as alwayss

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Antipathetic feeling,
bitterness from this drink,
I don’t know, it seems the color’s shrinking,
and the end has begun, the words are sinking.
The poetry begins to fade,
I don’t know what to write,
in truth, I don’t know what to feel,
I’m usually loving,
enough to be a fool, so real. Wow this was worded really good

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But maybe being a fool has its worth,
for in love's folly, there's warmth on this earth.
Even when the world turns dark and cold,
the heart persists, refuses to fold.
In poetry, I find refuge and peace,
where words heal what love can’t release.
And as time goes by and the pain subsides,
I keep writing, nourishing what inside resides. This last stanza is quite good too 🔥

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stiff jungle
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This poem is simply fascinating! The way you navigate the complexities of love and pain is uniquely sensitive. The beginning acknowledging being a fool when in love and recognizing that often when we are in love we make bad decisions shows how love leaves us vulnerable, but we accept it nonetheless.
The second stanza is perfect, it impeccably captures the pain and confusion that love can bring and the different ways people deal with the loss of it, escape, acceptance, withdrawal, sadness, hatred. It shows how love, such a pure and beautiful feeling, can end up generating other emotions, some neutral others with a soul-destroying power, like the part that says:

"While a few, in their gloomy despair,
just feel the need to break everything there,
taking out what wasn't love,
in poetry, a painful shove.''

resulting in another way of channeling this destruction, through poetry, showing how art can help to acclaim feelings. As in the last stanza, which, by the way, is my favorite. It shows how poetry becomes a refuge for all these emotions of lost love, especially the highlighted part

But maybe being a fool has its worth,
for in love's folly, there's warmth on this earth.
Even when the world turns dark and cold,
the heart persists, refuses to fold.
In poetry, I find refuge and peace,
where words heal what love can't release
And as time goes by and the pain subsides,
I keep writing, nourishing what inside resides.

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The idea of "keep writing, nourishing what inside resides" is beautiful. It shows that, even when everything seems lost, there is still something worth cultivating, be it art itself or the essence of who we are or what we will be.
And I can't forget to mention the rhymes, which are a rarity in your poems, but I loved them, incredible and subtle, giving a magnificent fluidity to the poem, making it almost melodic, making it even more engaging. Well done!SaberSaysPretty