#I Burn The Love In My Heart

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*Burn.
Burn until you're the last remaining ash.
I raise the roses to the skies,
the fire looks more beautiful in the sunlight.

You dared to be the one who loved me,
and I dared to love you
with all my heart.
You didn't love me
not even with a drop of your blood.
I don't know what you want,
was it always your desire to hate me?
Aww, I hate questioning myself:
why did you dare to pretend to love me?

I saw in your eyes what no one else could see.
I lived in paradise simply by being by your side.
I loved you like I burned this rose:
intense,
deep,
beginning,
middle,
end.
I burned the love in my heart
ONLY FOR YOU,
and you repaid me
by kissing another's lips,
an insult to love,
to my love,
and to my poems.

I threw myself into the shallow river of your love,
I drowned in your love,
in the shallows... of your love.
I drowned
in the shallows of your love.

This chaos that comes from my words
is nothing...
And my heart, I usually think with it,
and today... it's living in chaos.

These tears,
I don't know if I'm sad.
I think... disappointed,
defeated,
disillusioned.
I think... I'm heartbroken.

You burned my verses,
dishonored my heart,
destroyed my perception,
created doubts in my soul,
made my smile disappear.

Your icy heart
froze my feelings.
Take this burned rose.
I didn’t need to say it,
but it represents my hatred,
my disdain
for your beautiful smile,
your piercing gaze,
that warm embrace of yours.
I hate you.*

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@regal yarrow a hero

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"You burned my verses" HOLY GASHMOOZLE!!

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What is timeee?

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What is sleeep

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Eeeeh yeah what is sleep

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This is nicely written and relatable. I understood the line “These tears, I don't know if I'm sad. I think... disappointed, defeated, disillusioned. I think... I'm heartbroken.” It fits well with the title.

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you write really well

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This poem is simply visceral. It’s as if every word burns like the rose described. It’s a complete emotional rollercoaster, swinging from one extreme to another—from the warmth of passion at the beginning, through the disillusionment of loving alone and realizing the love received was false, to the cutting coldness of final betrayal. The image of the burning rose is beautifully symbolic, alluding to the title of the poem "I Burn The Love In My Heart", where we can imagine the rose representing love and the flame symbolizing the contempt and hatred of the lyrical voice.

The third stanza is one of my favorites because it’s where we truly see the intensity of the lyrical voice’s love for the beloved, where they say they lived in paradise and felt everything “intense, deep, beginning, middle, and end,” only to receive nothing but disdain and betrayal, resulting in an “insult” to love and to the poems, as if the beloved were treating the poet’s feelings as nothing, something despicable and disposable.

This leads to the recognition by the lyrical voice that this love was insufficient, and they gave their all, dove in headfirst:

I threw myself into the shallow river of your love,
I drowned in your love,
in the shallows... of your love.
I drowned
in the shallows of your love.

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This is incredible the image of someone who gave themselves completely, only to discover they were drowning in something that didn’t even have enough depth to support them. It’s a metaphor that is so cruelly beautiful because the idea of drowning in shallow waters is so ironic and painful. You laid bare the raw truth of unrequited love, a love that destroys without even being big enough to justify that destruction. And the ending, with the burned rose representing hatred (as I said, alluding to the poem’s title), is like the entire poem was a slow build-up to that point. The hatred and contempt are almost an inevitable response to the intensity of the love that was thrown away, turning an "I LOVE YOU" into an "I HATE YOU."
The contrast between the warmth of this fire and the icy heart of the beloved is so powerful that you can feel the transformation of these emotions and how much it hurt.
I loved it; the intensity of the emotions here is simply devastating. Truly incredible.SaberSaysPretty SaberSaysPretty

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This chaos that comes from my words
is nothing...
And my heart, I usually think with it,
and today... it's living in chaos. 🫰

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