#writing

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rancid orchid
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@modest sun @untold iron @untold iron @oak ivy @hot compass

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@hardy hamlet @little sail @copper light

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@versed oak @dusk tinsel @dire lance

slow night
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💗🫵🏼

rancid orchid
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@molten kestrel

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@modest sun i tried to do what you told me abt the punctuations ❤️

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@deep vigil

molten kestrel
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Sometimes, it's nice to know that others think alike.

"No erros allowed!"
"No mistake toleranced!"
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"You can't skip writing today!"
All shout at me. Not speak to me, shout. Really nice poem all about the beginning of creating a brand new poem. Beautifully structured

rancid orchid
marsh light
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This one?

rancid orchid
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yes!

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@signal wraith

molten kestrel
marsh light
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What I like about this poem is how it relates to a lot of writers with the first stanza.
Staring at a blank page could be daunting at times as you feel compelled to create.
The second stanza is very optimistic in its mission to write ( even if it does sacrifice sleep ).
The third stanza is felt all too much with all of us - seeing how we feel like we need to be
able to convey every thought as detailed or simply as possible.
The last stanza speaks to me the most as I have this self-discipline to write every day.
That is very much evident in my upload schedule of once every two days.

Overall : or being a succinct poem on Ars Poetica?
It completely does it job very well! Nice job on this one!

rancid orchid
untold iron
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I liked the punctuations, something I hadn't even noticed in the previous poems and which was corrected by hazelune_ - I'll refer to her this way, since I don't know if I can use ping.

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The fact that the last two stanzas seem to reflect an excess of criticism, effort and the quest to complete the work presents a very subtle hope. I really like what you've posted here.

modest sun
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I will critique this today for sure. Am a little caught up in the moment but I'm glad you considered my advice ♡♡

rancid orchid
signal wraith
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This hits veryy close to home for writers, lol.

The first thing I noticed was that you have a good rhyme scheme, but to me it feels like the poem could benefit from having more set syllable patterns. For instance:
“The expressions make me smother/As I try to perfect them, staying up late”. Imo this would flow better overall if the syllable count was more even.

Another thing I noticed is the shift in moods at each stanza. It starts off hopeful, excited, full of anticipation: literally “shimmering with high expectations”. You start off motivated to create something.
Then, the process of writing begins and you get into it, staying up late as you pour out your feelings.
However, by the end it changes to a darker, anxious tone — you’re putting pressure on yourself to get things right.
Then the very last line suggests that being so wrapped up in your work impacts who you are as a person.
This whole process you expressed is quite perceptive and relatable.

I liked this one a lot! Thanks for tagging me, and sorry for taking a bit of a long time to get to it

rancid orchid
signal wraith
modest sun
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Deeply adore this gem, as always. The simplicity in your words accompanied by the thoughtfullness is really good. Well done!

faint ibex
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Toleranced ?

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That’s an engineering term Dude 😅

rancid orchid
# faint ibex Toleranced ?

my bad, it's tolerated. English is not my first language. no need to point it out in a mischevious way.

faint ibex
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I’ll brace myself from saying/commenting anything in future 🙂.

deep vigil
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I really like how you captured the feelings of a writer. It's like you've bottled up the pressure and excitement of creating something new. The lines about high expectations and the fear of mistakes are super relatable.