Ode to the fog

[brisk heath]

@blazing marsh @tacit grove @tacit grove

@fringe crystal @cinder sorrel @rich plume

@hallow shale @analog swan @pearl wyvern

would appreciate some feedback and if i can improve anything on this. is the message clear?

[tacit grove]

Initially, given the economy of the sonnet, I was confused by the main message. What the stanzas reveal to me is a mixture of confusion, an embrace of the dynamism of life and romantic overtones.

From what I've noticed, the image that the story evokes is much more linked to what the verses show than the actual technique behind them. This strikes me as very good, extremely palpable and soft, eclectic and sincere.

One criticism I would specifically make is that, after the first stanza, it seems to me that the rest doesn't manage to rise to the same level of imagery as the "prologue" of this sonnet, leaving fragments that could go deeper.

[brisk heath]

Okay, thank you so much! Appreciate it