The poet's fate

[wind cargo]

@delicate kayak @hardy gull @gleaming nova

@sour heart @vapid silo @snow island

@still breach @desert hearth @candid drift

[hardy gull]

wow, this poem feels so introspective and haunting. the lines "actuality and illusory are out of touch" and "living a life struck by a curse" really stand out and paint a vivid picture of internal struggle😭 the theme of questioning one's reality is so relatable and just deep, like so many readers will be able to relate to stuff like that so it confirms this poem would do so well if published into a book or something! i love how you explore the idea of decay gripping your core; it adds a sense of inevitability and despair that's very powerful. the imagery you use throughout is captivating and evokes a strong emotional response, such as "letting decay grip my core" and "studying humanity, yet nowhere to be seen." perhaps delving deeper into some of these images could further enrich the poem? overall so good!!

[wind cargo]

THANK U SO MUCH!! I’m currently writing on a book and this made me consider taking it as the first page perhaps? I want something so that the reader feels understood and won’t let go of my poetry book (: you’re super kind, thank you very much and i’ll take the feedback into consideration!!

[wind cargo]

<@&1145760802666717234> hiiii

[gleaming nova]

Umm, well it’s introspective in nature…but it’s like you touched one topic/issue & suddenly went somewhere else!

[wind cargo]

there is literally 1 nature line which is an obvious metaphor for death (the main topic). How was it sudden? lol

[delicate kayak]

Wow. Actuality and illusory are out of touch while you are in the middle.
Perfect 💕

[hardy gull]

oh my god thats amazing!!!! yes, i could definitely see this being the first page like a poem as a snippet! and the name, "the poet's fate" is just so perfect it sounds like it's coming from you personally like a message from the poet to the reader. you're very welcome and i'm glad i could help! :))

[hardy gull]

One of those cases in which instrospection - as سناء rightly pointed out - gracefully sublimates the trappings of the doom that every poet is bound to ramble on about, as a sign of inevitability. As a sign of freedom.

Extremely consistent. It has a high dimensionality, a massive portfolio to understand and capture our insistence as artists on trying to digress into the myriad of daring that we get ourselves into, our weak point.

[ionic dawn]

Wonderful! @hardy gull has just pregressed to level 2!

[hardy gull]

It may just be an interpretation I've had, but that the first verses aparently convert the notion that physical death doesn't diminish life itself, nor that of the spirit. In Eastern Philosophy, consolidates a natural richness of living.

[wind cargo]

Yes exactly!! Thank you so much

[wind cargo]

Such a unique interpretation!! I haven’t even thought of that myself ❤️

[wind cargo]

@weak osprey

@naive beacon dont feel pushed to give feedback

[naive beacon]

You seem to have this reoccurring structure of two quatrains and two tercets, I like this

[wind cargo]

Yep, exactly !! I always use this tbh hahaha

[weak osprey]

Ooohh

This is my favourite one from.you

Great ones

This one was a more serious tone