#Late night texter

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flat elm
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You stalked my head.
I texted you back
As if something from your signs felt shockingly attractive.
After i swore id leave you alone
But i felt this connection before

I looked around.
I touched your back.
Handed you a book you said you’re interested in.
After i swore id leave you alone
But i felt this connection before

Oh here we go again.
The street is wet by rain.
The plans i have in my head .
recall the days, so alive.
After i swore id leave you alone
But i felt this connection before

Well printed memory.
But it sounds extraordinary.
I remember that i never lived a day, not alive.
Texted you again,
After i swore id leave you alone
But i felt this connection before

Let me tell you how it gets bad.

You should’ve read me when i first liked you,
I was like a flower that forever bloomed.
You cut off the roots and left me in the sun for way too long,
Mocking me around as if im a two years younger dog.

My story teller.
Keeps stealing my favorite plushes.
My late night lover.
*In my heart he prints a crush.
My story teller.
Only textes when its night.
My late night texter
Makes me feel like im never right.

My friend told me,
If i leave he will miss me.
And if i fix me,
My teller will be fixed with me.
Sew my plushes back!
Tend all the unhealed scars!
Forgot to ask if im fine,
‘Cause im not!

I smoked a cloud out of my balcony.
Remembering all the sweet things we could’ve done if you weren’t cruel to me.
The sweet voice, your chuckles and the stories were the printed tattoos in my heart.
The good looking boy i always had to hate, is the monster making me burn my life..

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She laughed so loudly at me after i told her i want to give you my heart.
Another said “you’re way too short, too
young he wont consider you just get along with your life!”
Collecting the love your had in your brain to give it to you back all again.
But, I can sense the hatred from a mile away. kindness sometimes makes me look like a fool.
But i, unconditionally, wanted to hear the bedtime story you saved for me tonight..

But i felt this connection before*

After i said im never gonna love again.
Oh here we go again…

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@thick sable
@distant sail
@wind wing

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@sharp jetty

wind wing
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My review! ✨

This may be the best I've ever read from you as far as I know! ❤️

The length/structure of the poem

The length of the poem's very refreshing to me!
It doesn't feel exhausting to read! :D
The variation with line length and stanzas flowed well 💖
I liked the repetitiveness in the first few stanzas with:
"But i felt this connection before" :>

Btw I may have found just one error so far:

is the monster making my burn my life..
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is the monster making ME burn my life..

Imagery / poetic devises

"The sweet voice your chuckles and the stories were the printed tattoos in my heart." 🔥❤️

This kind of imagery and metaphorical language is amazing and so unique to me!
You used a lot of smooth and clear imagery to describe things.

Yet again as I said, the repetitiveness was good, but it was a good idea to not add it to every stanza in the poem :D very clever!

OVERALL

You made such and enticing plot and I enjoyed reading every word of it ✨

I LOVED this a lot!
It felt so relatable :o
9/10 from me ❤️

distant sail
distant sail
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And too young not to young

thick sable
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You've improved so so much snowy

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The story portrayed was indeed amazing

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This is definitely your best one yet

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If you work on your grammar

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Like just the basics

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Your poems will be even more amazing

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Good job

flat elm
flat elm
flat elm