I'm Not the Surface But the Pit of My Being

[jaunty wyvern]

An expression on the in depth of every being.

@proven light

@candid sedge

[valid flax]

https://tenor.com/view/hug-warm-hug-depressed-hug-gif-4585064738068342394

[jaunty wyvern]

@humble ginkgo

@left talon

@teal seal

@muted anchor

@jaunty wyvern

@atomic sequoia

@cursive ingot

@uncut storm

@ivory tree

@spare spruce

@jaunty wyvern

[valid flax]

Puff is puff

You are the person who you are, and no matter how you see yourself or how others see you

You exist

You matter

[jaunty wyvern]

@regal moss

@pseudo shore

@jaunty wyvern

@valid flax

[jaunty wyvern]

Hugs you for long

[valid flax]

hugs you back

[candid sedge]

Phenomenal, as always 🙂

[uncut storm]

👀

[jaunty wyvern]

Of course you will say only that, I wrote it in our chat lol 🙂 thank youu

[hushed flower]

*Of course you will say

only that, I wrote it in

our chat lol 🙂 thank youu*

- Puff is Alive

[jaunty wyvern]

Ily Haiku

[jaunty wyvern]

👀

[candid sedge]

Of course, and it has only been improved further 🙂

Writing beautiful things is an art you've mastered

[jaunty wyvern]

Aww thanks Peanut device🥹

@jaunty wyvern

this is soo good, it's written so nicely, good job!!!

[sly meadow]

@jaunty wyvern I really like this the ending is simply amazing

[uncut storm]

This piece seems to grapple with existential questions/ emotions, using introspective language. There are evocative images throughout the poem, like-
teether my soul away
tip toe dream of hurricane
sickening witch
which vividly convey your inner turmoil mingled with conflict.

How come I never had the courage to get over the nightmares who cross the roads along with me ?
I think you meant-
How come I never had the courage to get over the nightmares that cross the roads along with me ?

The same tip toe dream of hurricane
The same tip toe dream of a hurricane

But who am I to them, isn't who am I to me.
But who am I to them, isn't who I am to me.

I'll be the grave for the living who wanted life a lot more than they just wanted to be
I'll be the grave for the living who wanted life a lot more than they wanted to just be. (This one can be subjective, but I believe it kinda smooths the overall flow)
Hope this helps. 😊

[jaunty wyvern]

Ah thank you, this makes sense I posted the raw work coz I was too excited to have written after so long lol, I appreciate this. Thanks, Harshk!!

[jaunty wyvern]

Thanks a bunch, I'm glad you like it!!!

[uncut storm]

Your welcome dear 😊

Btw

I did tag you in my newest one

[jaunty wyvern]

I'll get to it soon 🙂

[ivory tree]

Ok i like the title poem

nice job

[humble ginkgo]

Puff this is awesome. The way the emotions are wrapped in these words are perfect. Also, I hope you heal from whatever that is tormenting you 🥲 💕

[spare spruce]

But who am I to them,
isn't who I am to me.
I'll be the grave for the living who wanted life a lot more than they wanted just to be

🛐🛐🛐

[jaunty wyvern]

Aww thank youu dear ❤️

[jaunty wyvern]

Thanks a bunch, Jane!! You are welcome to express too thank you I appreciate you :))

[jaunty wyvern]

Thanks!

@worn compass

@jaunty wyvern

@jaunty wyvern

@scenic marten

@bleak dragon

[scenic marten]

I got tagged in a puff poem ASADSFJH YIPPEEE

[worn compass]

damn, this poem really captures the struggle of finding urself and ur place in the world

the way u use th images of searching for urself in unexpected places and feeling empty really hit home

[scenic marten]

"*What about the torn, dear?
What about the empty? *" this question arises empathy in me I swear </3

[scenic marten]

EXACTLY LIKE I AGREE

[worn compass]

"what about the torn, dear" added so much weight to the pain and suffering yr going thru

[worn compass]

RIGHT

that last line abt being a grave for the living who wanted life more is pretty heavy and sad, but it also shows how much ur willing to give up for others🥹

[scenic marten]

yeah thats so great job!!

[jaunty wyvern]

Awww thank you so much dear, I'm glad you enjoyed this read. Thank you for expressing on my expression once again ❤️

[jaunty wyvern]

That's so sweet of you, I'm glad you liked it 😭 thank you my love!

[scenic marten]

you are welcome!!

[jaunty wyvern]

@echo spire

[left talon]

It's probably not good that this one is so relatable, but it's so moving and emotional and raw, it's amazing 💜

[jaunty wyvern]

Thank youuuuu my love

@jaunty wyvern

[tidal star]

puff how is this old 😭

it’s excellent tho

[jaunty wyvern]

You can check the date lol

[jaunty wyvern]

Thanks a bunch :))

[proven light]

this piece is deep and intense! lines like "what about the torn, dear? what about the empty?" hit hard. the poem feels raw and genuine; you're pouring your soul out here, and it shows! loved it :)

[jaunty wyvern]

Awww I'm glad you liked it dear <33

@open garnet

[open garnet]

This one is truly amazing and I mean it
I absolutely love this one, god I am actually sad I didn't see this earlier

Puff! Ping me in your poems whenever you post

[jaunty wyvern]

Awww I will ping you <33 thank youu I appreciate your words hon