#Cradling Deceit, Like Love - Jane

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Cradling Deceit, Like Love - Jane

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@rigid whale

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@uneven jackal

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@pure charm

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@lethal magnet

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@inland bluff

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@red kiln

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@cedar finch

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@red kiln

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@strong pecan

uneven jackal
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You have more friends than I do already

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@lofty mulch

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uneven jackal
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I like the pauses, it makes reading it pleasing to my soul

vivid crest
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@robust wren

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@carmine totem

exotic bramble
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I really like your elderly language in all your poems!! Really makes them unique and stand out
& also like the way your directly speak to the reader as well ❤️

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crystal turtle
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Very good english words used here
it's so sophisticated

fallow zephyr
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Have I no place to live,
Nor a land to go,
These gray skies crumbled
To tears and plethora--
Of malodorous snow. 🫰

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good job as always

rigid whale
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💔

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rigid whale
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The theme of deceit, loss & loneliness are clear & poignant in this, with highly poetic, maybe somewhat archaic language which helps in evoking a sense of depth. There are very strong symbolism’s throughout the poem like
Grey skies crumbled to tears
malodorous snow
my screams rehashed
These elements contribute to creating a mood & vivid atmosphere.
👌🏻

rigid whale
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twin star
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Omggg I love this!! Its really good! The last stanza is amazing as well! The language and style you use are amazing!

vivid crest
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@vale drift

cedar finch
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Oh wow, this is amazing

smoky oxide
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a pretty sophisticate use of english words!! the poem is incredible <3
"*For all was I worth,
Carving through erstwhile--escapades.
Always another decaying delinquent,
Neverforth lived I--A gruesome poetess. *"

wanton bramble
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Im im loveee

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The vocabulary is beautiful

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I have no remarks its so beautiful almost flawless

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vivid crest
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@lofty mulch

pure charm
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In these crestfallen lands,/My screams rehashed-/Dear reader, never would you hear me,/For there was tis damned stench/Impaling my bloodied, bare hands.

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🫰🫰🫰

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@red kiln

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@mortal citrus

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