#Fantasy Forest

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subtle grotto
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Traverse through trees
I mind the bees
This muddy swamp's up to my knees
Tally clicks, ticks, of these

Chains forgotten, ungreased
Though I keep steady breathe
With a slight, profound glee
Only a subtlety

Creas–ed shoes over leaves
Journey by me, who heaves
I am almost here
Tickticktick

Ticktick

Tick

Screw the bike.
I'm staying here.

I cannot stand the world of tears
I will only come back to strangers, fears
I cannot stand those urban shears
To my nature, of being here

I found this, here
I found me, here
The sunsets here
Are pretty, dear

Young me, leave soon
Leave, now. By noon
Just hear me, I'm
Talking to you

Take someone when you come up
Not a stickler, not strung-up
Not an #!&hole as summed up

...I'm exhausted, I'm tired
I've lost it, It's dire

I have little water
I am certainly fodder
For critters and beasts
Those looking for a feast

Yet somehow I don't care
I cannot seem to care
As I went down this way
I saw prints of a bear

(I cannot seem to bare
The wisdom had been shared
So I block out a share
With the clothing I wear)

Let me have this, please
Sunset's wonderful, please
Don't go now, it's too soon
It's hardly past noon

Where the hell am I at?
I made friends with an ferret.
I played cards with a parrot,
And I lost, how 'bout that?

I made friends with a bunny
Cause I fed her a carrot
Best friends with a bear
Cause I gave her my honey

I'm a friend with a gecko
Much harder to let go
Best friends with an owl
Resting face is a scowl

I'm a buddy with a lizard
He fancies himself a wizard
I'm friends with a possum
And she's really, really, awesome

I talked to a crocodile
Said my rhymes were juvenile
Ride or die's an alligator
Hasn't said yet, see you later

...I hung out with a monkey
Played some poker, ...lost my money...
I love this forest, love it so
I've watched the saplings as I've grown

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@south bobcat

south bobcat
subtle grotto
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@tribal ibex

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Sorry for the late ping.

subtle grotto
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@reef arch

reef arch
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--i was asked to judge harshly, don't think I'm a jerk-- Lots of unnecessary words,very forced rhymes interrupt the flow, the onomatopoeia is pretty good but overused, this one's very simple and feels like a warm up exercise of a poem, repetition of here could make a much better poem

subtle grotto
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I don't think you're a jerk, don't worry 😂

subtle grotto
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Like a child's book?