#Appreciated

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polar venture
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We met in the art room
I observed chatter bloom
Art and drawing aside
You took me by surprise
We loved the same guy
Big hat and purple eyes
He was on your screen
My eyes lit up so keen

I questioned if it was true
Replied the awaited truth
I felt much excitement
How connections meant
Like dominoes in a line
Our stitches intertwined
Our acquaintance bloomed
Withering wasn’t presumed

We were stitched swiftly
Linked together contentedly
You took up the empty seat
Of previous cafeteria discreet
Amit the solidarity of ignore
You and I were forevermore
Ultimately felt a sense of peace
Noticing my solidarity decrease

We painted our portraits artfully
Colorfully and heart-fully
Our sketches filled with pride
Of what friendship can’t divide
Texting each other day-to-day
Was adulation in the best way
I felt appreciated by you
Being best friends was the truth

Leaving it aside was happiness
Lucidity became haziness
Our bright stars intertwined
Our creations vivid to declined
Lessons became my weapons
The harsh truth now reckons
You are moving away
From our town now gray

We won’t conquer high school
Together in our freshman rule
My face froze as I’m conscious
So please keep our promise
Of keeping touch in distance
Remembering our existence
Yet I’m away for the summer
And I observe our plant wither

Contentment existed with you
In our belittled town in hue
The church bells would ring
Marking the birth of spring
The truth’s now been prevailed
Long live the ships we sailed
Now I wave our last goodbye
At your shore for the last time

Hoping excellence for you
Wherever you flew to
I hope you commemorate
All the memories we made
Create art for the world
Luminary and affiliate
Your puzzle pieces completed
My puzzle of discreetness

If you don’t commemorate
I’ll eternally feel appreciated
From you, Nikshita
Even if you’re excrete

uneven agate
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Punctuation??? 😭😭😭

polar venture
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It’s a poem..

jolly glacier
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Really great! The lack of punctuation wasn’t an issue for me, and the line breaks with the rhymes made it really easy to glide with

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I quite liked the rhymes actually, and I felt like the sense of story was not lost with the imagery

uneven agate
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Punctuation isn't really necessary

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The lines are pretty short and it's easy to understand where to pause

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And where not to

uneven agate
cursive jolt
uneven agate
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Whats that

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Poetry with no punctuation?

polar venture
cursive jolt
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its when lines dont have punctuation at the end so that the reader reads the poem faster

polar venture
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Thank you all 🙂

uneven agate
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Well yes

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It creates a nice flow

cursive jolt
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I mean, you have seen me use enjambment in my most recent poem

nova cradleBOT
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*I mean, you have seen

me use enjambment in my

most recent poem*

- kevionso
cursive jolt
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I'm on a Haiku streak today

uneven agate
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Yeah

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Nice poemm

cursive jolt
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It's a very useful tool in poetry

uneven agate
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Hmm I see

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I could try it out

cursive jolt
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doesnt need to be the whole poem all the time

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but it can also put some meaning behind certain lines and stanzas

uneven agate
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Hmmm

dark python
polar venture
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Thanks bro

proven plinth
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The storytelling in this one is well done, you have some good word choices, you work pretty well in the AABB scheme for this one but I'd love to see what you'd do in a poem without it, personally I believe you could benefit from a few end punctuations just for some added drama when reading