#The cherries

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quiet dove
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***These cherries are artificial;
Bald earth descends on their offspring,
As it waits quietly for its neutral spring,

The earless flowers make room
In these countless hours:
Grayness inhibits these flowers.

The cherries confine the life
That was ours, gray throats scorn
These shameful propositions;

Swallowing the cherries of death,
As they mingle in their obscure decisions.
Breathtaking, they flaunt in this clutch garden,

Gray beds subside their awful mourning;
Gray plants distort their shameful cherries,
As the dark stars descend on this sultry garden.

Nimble and quiet, the fever feeds
On these dead cherries; the rancorous
Smirk chokes the bald angel,

Though, the earless flower agitates them.
Our goat throat is fertile to gore;
Ghost of a cherry lies flat in this corridor.***

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quiet dove
# quiet dove > ***These cherries are artificial; > Bald earth descends on their offspring, > ...

The central idea of the poem revolves around the artificiality and emptiness of life, represented by the cherries that are described as artificial and shameful. The poem explores themes of mortality, decay, and the fleeting nature of existence. the poem appears to be a reflection on the impermanence of life and the inevitability of death. The imagery of cherries, flowers, and gardens suggests a natural setting, while the dark and ominous tone conveys a sense of foreboding and despair. The poem may also be commenting on the artificiality and emptiness of modern society.

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onyx walrus
# quiet dove > ***These cherries are artificial; > Bald earth descends on their offspring, > ...

Ok this piece appears to explore themes of artificiality, decay & a sense of bleakness/despair.
The poem uses vivid imagery & symbolic language to convey the themes. It invokes cherries as a central motif, often symbolising life, death & possibly artificiality or something tainted. suggesting a contrast between natural beauty & manufactured or false appearance. The language is often poetic some what metaphorical, aiming to create an atmosphere of introspection & melancholy. some phrases like verbose & hideous, florid honors can feel overly abstract or convoluted, potentially distancing readers from the emotional core of the poem. (This can be subjective but worth mentioning i guess 😅)
Hope this helps. 😊

quiet dove
viscid ferry
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I personally relate to this poem- you've surpassed my expectations again!

"*Swallowing the cherries of death,
As they mingle in their obscure decisions.
Breath-taking, they flaunt in this clutch garden,

Gray beds subside their awful mourning;
Gray plants distort their shameful cherries,
As the dark stars descend on this sultry garden.*"
felt. <3

covert oxide
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I don't know why but these poems feel like getting repetitive now, despite the constant mixing in of new vocabulary

quiet dove
covert oxide
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They were good at first but they're everywhere now

quiet dove
viral flint
# quiet dove <@760850102729834549>

'Breath-taking, they flaunt in this clutch garden'
*Breath-taking, is the experience of being tagged first in all your poems ma professor.

uncut tree
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sometimes i take for granted just how crazy good you are lol

hallow oakBOT
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*sometimes i take for

granted just how crazy good

you are lol*

- Lee (Real Hater)
uncut tree
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ugh

willow egret
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Using cherries as a metaphor for the artificiality of life is so unique

quiet dove
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@onyx walrus I re-edit the line to grayness inhibits these flowers

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from Verbose and hideous: florid honors

onyx walrus
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And it exhibits next to none abstractness

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