#I’m the Hollow King…

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sinful igloo
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@strong goblet

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@pine patio

pine patio
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this poem is intense and powerful. the imagery of being a "hollow king" on a throne of broken things really sets the tone of desolation and inner turmoil. the way you describe the darkness as comforting and your sanity unraveling really hits hard. the broken bird imagery is striking, showing how trapped you feel. the part about longing for death and even getting rejected by it is truly heartbreaking-
this piece really captures the depth of those feelings in a raw and relatable way.

strong goblet
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I'll be sure to read

strong goblet
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As im reading it

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The last line of the second stanza kind of disrupted the flow

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Nice ending

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I liked it a lot

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I think a smoother flow would benefit your future workd

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Works

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Because in longer poems, flow is important

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Aside from thatt

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Perhaps a bit more depth would be helpful

sinful igloo
sinful igloo
strong goblet
sinful igloo
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