#The Arsonist & The Firefighter

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wintry moat
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The Arsonist and the Firefighter

She had no business waltzing into my life,
and yet there she stood, atop my fiery gaze.
I remember the first time hearing her flowful voice, a different accent to the ones I am used to,
it stood out to me, like flowers do among blades of grass.
Her voice played in my head like a symphonic suite addressed to it's audience,
the mind registering every sound and letter her beautiful lips would utter.

I remember the first time I considered that I may like her,
and suddenly her presence was cultivated into my mind, as though forbidden to leave.
To be smitten by a woman so easily was a shock to me,
and yet it was her arms that softened my fall.
She was the fortitude of my mind, and the blood of my heart.

I was an arsonist, and she was a firefighter,
she was able to extinguish any flames that violently raged within me.
She would console me, listen to me and strengthen me,
Trials and Tribulations were many, and yet she was my only Triumph,
There were days where all I did was speak to her, listening to her voice and agreeing with everything she said,
too enamored by her fables she would tell, and the presence she contributed to care about giving my own thoughts.

There would be times where we would argue, but we would swiftly recover and love each other stronger,
Whenever something ignited within, she would put it out and tend to the damage.
I vividly remember transgressing, and charring her core, my one treasure in this world,
I had signed my death sentence without knowing it,
me being the arsonist, and her being the firefighter,
I stepped upto the Gallows, knowing the fate that awaited me
and so she put out the last flame, banishing me from this realm of Belonging I had longed for.

~The Arsonist

limpid sedge
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This poem has great storytelling, I love the relationship roles you gave to an arsonist and firefighter, your use of in line rhymes, as well as alliteration helps your flow, your depth is well formed and you have good word choices, you could benefit from a few word changes (I know it's about fire/arson, but you use burn/burning a lot, I suggest substituting some for charred, torched, etc), this is a very good piece though and I look forward to seeing you progress!💜

wintry moat
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[Edits will be made, for those who read this poem henceforth]

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Touched it up a bit.

limpid sedge
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In future poems you could benefit by variation in some line lengths, you use a lot of very long lines in this one, but it fits relatively well with the love story aspect so I'd keep it as is💜

wintry moat
limpid sedge
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I'm personally a firefighter so with permission I would 100% like to use firefighter and her arsonist as a prompt for my own distant poem