#Stars (As It Should've Been)

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fervent bane
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Yeah I can't really find a different name, but it shares a common reference with another one of my poems.

Stars
Stars

Seem so far
Thought best over two cigars

Stars
Stars

Seem so far
Can't even fly ourselves to Mars

Stars
Stars

Seem so far
Got me picking at my guitar

Stars
Stars

Seem so far
Was that my hand that gave you scars?

Stars
Stars

Seem so far
Was that my hand that pushed you far?

Stars
Stars

Seem so far
Look, I bought you a pretty car!

Stars
Stars

Seem so far
Could we find light in superstars?

Stars
Stars

Seem so far
They absorb all, black holes of tars

Stars
Stars

Seem so far
The darkest places? Not our bars

Stars
Stars

Seem so far
Find inspiration behind bars

Stars
Stars

Seem so far
But know one thing, they will be ours

Stars
Stars

Seem so far
I hold a few inside some jars

Stars
Stars

Seem so far
The sky holds numerous bazaars

Stars
Stars

Seem so far

I'm trying, please, I'm trying, hard

Stars
Stars

Seem so far
I didn't mean to go that far...

Stars
Stars

Seem so far
Don't look at me, just watch the stars

Stars
Stars

You seem so far...
Your hurts and harms my hands did carve

Stars
Stars

Seem so far
I see my brands on both your arms

Stars
Stars

Seem so far
I forced us both to play our cards

Stars
Stars

Seem so far
I said I'd ensure you no harm

Stars
Stars

Seem so far
Can we leave earth? I'll take your scarves

Stars
Stars

Seem so far
Come with me, please, I love you far.

Stars
Stars

Go so far
It's all for you, to see yourself
It's all for you, so let me help

'cause

Stars,
Stars...

Seem so far...

...But when you're here, one isn't far.

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This is my most recent poem as of now. It's essentially my first draft but I figured more is not always more, and decided to leave it as-is with only minor revisions and edits.

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That being said, I think this is easily amongst my best work. Arguably my best work.

fervent bane
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@spring sorrel

spring sorrel
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honestly, probably the best I’ve read of yours flow wise

So smooth off the tongue

So simple yet holds so much

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You are incredible mr

fervent bane
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Thank you, as always.

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I'm working on a poem right now, but I would love to help out today.

leaden hazelBOT
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*I'm working on a

poem right now, but I would love

to help out today.*

- 0nes4ndzer0s
fervent bane
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@finite kelp

tacit crypt
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I love it so much, the rhythm is amazing. The title sounds like a Car Seat Headrest song title lol /pos

fervent bane
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Thank you!

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I've also seen an artist use it to say "remastered" but I mean it more literally.