Lacuna of Longing

[primal stag]

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[primal stag]

@queen geode

[queen geode]

Oh yes

Nice play with the fragments

Okay nice one

Short and sweet

I personally liked it a lot lot

Imo, the line "etched into the evey fabric of my being". This one could've been a bit better!

It's obviously not bad at all

Seeing how creative everything is

You could've added a bit more creativity there i believe

Other than that

I've nothing to say

Great one

[primal stag]

Thank you so much, I’m glad you enjoyed reading it 😊

[primal stag]

@junior field
(I apologize if i am bothering you with notifications 😅, I just want to ensure you see the ones i think you'll enjoy.)

[junior field]

oh dont worry about it youre not bothering me

[junior field]

and i'd love reading your poems

ok damn-
this one's a deeply moving poem. the imagery of standing on the shore of your heart and the waves of grief is powerful. the line about clinging to the fragments of love, like shattered glass, beautifully captures the pain of holding onto something broken. and the ending, about losing yourself in losing him kinda hurt 😭

loved it!

[primal stag]

I'm glad the poem resonated with you so deeply! 😊
Sometimes poetry has a way of reaching into our hearts & reflecting our own experiences back to us.
But that’s what makes it beautiful too isn’t it !

[warm ginkgo]

This is genuinely amazing. I’m a sucker for the way words are pronounced and the repetition of the sharp “sh” sound after the ‘fragments’ break really add to the destruction and pain of loss. Well done!

[primal stag]

Thank you so much for your wonderful feedback.
It means a lot that you noticed those details & found them impactful. 😊

[junior field]

yeah agreed

[primal stag]

@worldly wagon (re tag)

Technically this one is not a re tag lol