#Midnight Lucidity

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latent ruin
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@delicate edge
@visual imp
@limpid swallow
@violet egret

visual imp
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BSTSIEEE

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OMFF

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I LOVE RJIS

delicate edge
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I LOVEEE THATTTTTTTTTTTRTTT

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🦭💗🥰🦭💗🦭💗🥰👅👁️💗👅💗👅🥰

latent ruin
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TYSM SAM AND VIVI <3

latent ruin
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@analog osprey hereee

analog osprey
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@latent ruin oh boy that was a ride

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The flow had it's ups and downs

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But it certainly wasn't anything that bothered me

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I loved the idea

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But i think you definitely could add some more

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emotion

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Or yk

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pain

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Something that could make my heart race

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Yk yk

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But don't worry

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It certainly didn't lack emotions

latent ruin
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ooooo

analog osprey
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There was just room for a little more imo

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It was a great one

latent ruin
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I seeee omg okay

analog osprey
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And like

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"the light you shone through your tower guided my ship into rocks"???

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Like omgg????

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Too beautiful

latent ruin
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:DDDD

analog osprey
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I orgasm'd

latent ruin
analog osprey
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See

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Just go for

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Whatever feels the best

latent ruin
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hmmmm

analog osprey
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Usually that's the best way to add emotion

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Well at least for me

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It works

latent ruin
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its very interesting as i write most my poems with whatever emotions i feel in that moment, and this one was kinda like, showcasing a relationship or fatuation that ended

analog osprey
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It's you in your own world

analog osprey
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What feels the most appropriate

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Or do you write

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What feels the best

latent ruin
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tysm btw :>

analog osprey
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I didn't mean that it doesn't have feelings

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I meant like

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More

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Depth?

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Gravity?

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Something like that you know

latent ruin
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more detail?

analog osprey
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I mean detail doesn't necessarily add weight

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Welps just

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I think you should just go over it and see if YOU feel like making any changes

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And if you dont

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Then all well and good

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The poem is fireeee

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🔥🔥

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Hotter than my flames

latent ruin
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I sure will! thanks for the feedback it really helps

analog osprey
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And I'm a dragon at that

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Wow

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I'm ashamed

latent ruin
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hehehee

analog osprey
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I shall get revenge some day

latent ruin
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not with this feedback you gave me, I SHALL GROW BETTER EVERY DAY >:D

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t'was all part of my plan

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lol

analog osprey
latent ruin
analog osprey
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i definitely will get revenge

latent ruin
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sure, until I guide your ship into rocks

analog osprey
latent ruin
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damn- thats such a good line tbh 😭

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AAAAAAAAAAAA like LITERALLY SO GOOD

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if you dont use that in a poem, I WILL

analog osprey
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Both of us could

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perhaps tis the binding of our fate

latent ruin
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our poems will share a line, I see

analog osprey
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I will definitely save it

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@latent ruin if you don't mind, could you review this poem. It didn't get much traction

latent ruin
analog osprey
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#1257998245678944256

analog osprey
analog osprey
latent ruin
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OH LOL,
I WILL :D
gimme a moment im replying to friends

quiet muralBOT
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*OH LOL, I

WILL :D gimme a moment

im replying to friends*

- kevionso
analog osprey
violet egret
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you meant to illuminate the danger contrasted with I chased your light is very strong🔥, your imagery is lovely and I appreciate the punctuation and line variations in this one, the theme about relationships is a bit confusing throughout but I enjoyed the poem nonetheless💜

latent ruin
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Relationships are confusing.

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Especially with the wrong partner

latent ruin
analog osprey
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Good job

limpid swallow
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as always ur poems have crazy imagery

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i cant stop myself from drowning in it

latent ruin
latent ruin
limpid swallow
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OH YES I HVE ANOTHER MASTERPIECE LEFT TO READ

limpid swallow
latent ruin
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LOL NO PROBLEM

latent ruin
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