I Claim

[potent harbor]

A lost cause. Gone .
Is what I am.
Or so I used to claim.

A boy with no success. Withdrawn .
Is what I am.
Or so I used to claim.

A man with no empathy. Fall .
Is what I am.
Or so I used to claim.

  But time has moved, 
      And I have improved.

A found soul. Present .
Is what I am.
In which I claim.

A boy with potential. Significant .
Is what I am.
In which I claim.

A man with empathy. Recalled .
Is what I am.
In which I claim.

[median violet]

Wonderful! @potent harbor has just pregressed to level 6!

[potent harbor]

@left shoal
@plucky quartz
@steel island
@unreal agate

[left shoal]

I like how you structured it, with the literal position of all of the words.

Definitely adds a certain touch to the poem.

[potent harbor]

Im so glad you got it!!!, I was nervous it wouldn’t get recognised on what I was trying to do

[steel island]

This is really good

I’m curious as to what is the significance of the spacing tho? Like what does it mean?

[potent harbor]

I used the spacing to indicate a type of lost feeling, like a type of way to show how far off I was gone and then the spacing became closer once ‘improved’

If that makes sense

[steel island]

That’s makes sense

Gotchu

[unreal agate]

wow dusty, i can see that this poem beautifully explores personal growth and transformation, if im not wrong

[potent harbor]

Exactly that

[unreal agate]

The pphrase a boy with no success" at the beginning kinda creates a sense of despair and limitation, but the final stanzas reveal progress and newfound confidence!

and also the way u use of powerful and positive terms like "found soul" and "potential" really conveys hope and determination. Well written!!!!!!!!!!!!

[potent harbor]

!!!! Thank you so muchhhhhhhhh

[potent harbor]

I really do appreciate it!!