#the raven.

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silk pilot
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@coarse vigil

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@silent plinth

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@glass scroll

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@slender marlin

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@silent plinth

slender marlin
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This poem is dark and haunting, vividly portraying the contrast between the world of the living and the world of the dead

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The raven as a symbol of death and foreboding adds to the sense of gloom and despair, while the descriptions of the "dead roaring in envy" and the "burning edges of the bullet hole" create vivid and visceral imagery

silk pilot
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@robust crag

slender marlin
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The last two lines add a touch of irony and black humour to the piece, as the living envy the stillness and peace of the dead

silk pilot
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@steel quiver

slender marlin
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A thought provoking and well written poem!! bunnyhappy

silk pilot
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@kind vine

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@silent plinth

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@prisma sun

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@shut nexus

silk pilot
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@opaque lantern

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@weak ferry

opaque lantern
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Not really reading/reviewing poems cause of some probs and exams...
I'll give it a read in a while as I'm free today tho:)

weak ferry
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Oh. I read this some time ago. I liked it.

silk pilot
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the raven.

silk pilot
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@lapis lintel @silent plinth

lapis lintel
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I already read this one

silk pilot
lapis lintel
silent plinth
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I have read it

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Verus tagged me here

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Ig he wrote a version of urs or smtg

silk pilot
silent plinth
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Don't you know him?

silent plinth
silk pilot
silent plinth
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But it was good
Very deep and dark

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Ur poem

silk pilot
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@chrome wedge

silent plinth
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This is beautiful

silk pilot
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@cedar breach

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To me, the first stanza seems to speak entirely of death and anguish. In a beautiful way. With “hark” and “shrieked” in the same line, it portrays pain and suffering to me. With the second stanza echoing this further, with the metaphor “warm ruby waves” for the blood being pumped. And thus the question, “is this enough to make it alive” really brings a sense of complete sorrow, to a point of harrow to the reader.

And I know it may not be the first interpretation. But in stanza 4, you explore deeply the idea of uncertainty. From “fantasy” contrasted with “mortal” in the following line. It echoes the inexplicability of life itself. It conveys the inability to pinpoint a meaning to life. And it is truly beautiful.

In the final stanza, starting with the alliterative phrase “beater breath” it creates a sense of imprisonment for the poet, this is due to your use of assonance. The repetition of vowels creates tension whilst reading, which is of course deserving of merit!
The final lines complete this poem perfectly, “bleak tombs” conveys the actuality of death, the finality of it and the morbid nature of life which is entirely intrinsic.
“Poetry… epitaphs” further reinforce the idea that this poem is, in an interpretive way, an ode to life; alongside death.

Furthermore, “viridescent” juxtaposes the entire poem, and it is an excellent choice. As death and nature are not often related, but you have managed to do so!

Really, well done!