#This is how I was Raised

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tired horizon
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A Prose Poem expressing one's upbringing and identity in melancholy.

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@vagrant smelt

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@tired horizon

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@tawny whale

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@woeful kraken

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@tired horizon

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@winged vortex

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@lone chasm

vagrant smelt
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OK the way you weave your words together creates such a vivid and raw atmosphere. i could almost feel the heat and the tension in every line.
the metaphor of touch burning like lava and shedding skin like a snake is intense and evocative. it really captures the essence of feeling consumed by an internal fire, yet still being in search of an identity.
the final wish to have your ashes buried in hell is a striking conclusion. it speaks to a desire for transformation and understanding, even in death. puff you did it again, you did an excellent job again in conveying such profound emotion and depth with your words

tired horizon
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@eternal wyvern

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@round depot

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@wraith nova

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@ashen tundra

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@inland basin

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@royal island

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@tired horizon

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@tired horizon

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@red stratus

wraith nova
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This piece is dark and provocative, using vivid imagery and metaphors to describe the speaker's experience of being "raised near hell."

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The use of repetition in the first two lines adds emphasis and a sense of cyclicality to the poem, while the description of their touch as "burning like lava" and their skin shedding adds a sense of pain and vulnerability

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The speaker's desire to know what hell is and to experience it themself is a powerful msg, and the use of the last two lines to express their final wish adds a sense of despair and desolation

tired horizon
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"Raised somewhere near hell, never in it"
From this line, I could already sense the emotions flow through. I enjoy your poems very much Puff. Thank you and keep it up.

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tired horizon
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@native warren