Tears of flame | The Art of Poetry | Page 1

quartz cave Jun 17, 2024, 3:53 AM

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Love resurrects my tears of flame.
My shadow coexists; the taste is bitter.
The shell shrinks in this wavering pain.

For the cherubim, mercy is obscene,
Though the candle ignites the heather.
Love resurrects my tears of flame.

The light beckons in the shallow rain.
My garden is black and fails to bother;
The shell shrinks in this wavering pain.

The pebbles wither and wither again.
The roses were lovely: the smell of thunder.
Love resurrects my tears of flame.

For the barren tombs of my disdain
Won't awaken my obnoxious clover.
The shell shrinks in this wavering pain.

Will the angels ever hear my complaint?
I touch the silk as it cures my blisters.
Love resurrects my tears of flame.
The shell shrinks in this wavering pain.

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cobalt citrus Jun 17, 2024, 3:57 AM

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I see that you have changed your profile once more, Vindi.

quartz cave Jun 17, 2024, 3:57 AM

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@modest hazel

quartz cave Jun 17, 2024, 3:57 AM

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cobalt citrus I see that you have changed your profile once more, Vindi.

Yes i did

undone cobalt Jun 17, 2024, 3:57 AM

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niiice

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I like it

quartz cave Jun 17, 2024, 3:57 AM

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undone cobalt I like it

Thank you

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cobalt citrus Jun 17, 2024, 4:08 AM

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👀

summer dove Jun 17, 2024, 4:08 AM

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Ah there we go yet another great poem from vindicator! I like it!

quartz cave Jun 17, 2024, 4:08 AM

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cobalt citrus 👀

huh

quartz cave Jun 17, 2024, 4:09 AM

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summer dove Ah there we go yet another great poem from vindicator! I like it!

Thank you

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leaden rivet Jun 17, 2024, 4:21 AM

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"The light beckons in the shallow rain.
My garden is black and fails to bother;
The shell shrinks in this wavering pain."
The whole poem is absolutely fantabulous but this is my favorite stanza, lovely as always! <3

quartz cave Jun 17, 2024, 4:21 AM

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quartz cave Jun 17, 2024, 4:21 AM

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leaden rivet "The light beckons in the shallow rain. My garden is black and fails to bother; ...

Thank you ❤️

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celest kite Jun 17, 2024, 4:23 AM

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Me

quartz cave Jun 17, 2024, 4:24 AM

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celest kite Me

yes what do u think of my poem ?

celest kite Jun 17, 2024, 4:25 AM

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The symbolism is absolutely stunning, and the repetition helps to drive home the themes the poem is displaying. Tears of a flame is an incredibly clever oxymoron that I enjoy

quartz cave Jun 17, 2024, 4:25 AM

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celest kite The symbolism is absolutely stunning, and the repetition helps to drive home the...

Yesss thank you

quartz cave Jun 17, 2024, 4:54 AM

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rough dock Jun 17, 2024, 5:10 AM

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I've only seen a few of your poems, but so far this is my favourite. The flow of positive and negative emotions here feels like a dance, and the imagery in stanza 2-3 really helps to set the mood for that.
I also like the semi-rhyming between stanzas, it's a great touch.

I'm not sure about your use of tender as a noun here, I get what you mean but as a noun it mostly makes me think of food. I think if you rearrange a bit to make it an adjective the line will be much better

eternal canopy Jun 17, 2024, 5:14 AM

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This is really good👍..

quartz cave Jun 17, 2024, 5:24 AM

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rough dock I've only seen a few of your poems, but so far this is my favourite. The flow of...

it is used as an adjective here

rough dock Jun 17, 2024, 5:35 AM

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quartz cave it is used as an adjective here

so to get rid of the double meaning I think you should give it a specific noun to describe, because as it is grammatically it's a noun, which makes the word ambiguous, and I think hurts what you meant here

quartz cave Jun 17, 2024, 5:39 AM

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rough dock so to get rid of the double meaning I think you should give it a specific noun t...

oK ILL come back to it

quartz cave Jun 17, 2024, 5:42 AM

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rough dock so to get rid of the double meaning I think you should give it a specific noun t...

is it better now , i changed it to

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rough dock Jun 17, 2024, 7:24 AM

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I really like it!
I think it holds the spot in the positive-negative duality very well, and I also think the sibilant sound makes it fit a little better with the rhythm of the line

raven marlin Jun 17, 2024, 11:47 AM

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quartz cave Love resurrects my tears of flame. My shadow coexists; the taste is bitter. The ...

This is a really striking and emotional piece

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The repeated line "Love resurrects my tears of flame" is really powerful and evocative, as is the imagery of the shell shrinking in pain and the garden being black and failing to bother

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The use of words like "cherubim," "heather," and "clover" gives the poem a sense of whimsy and magic, even amidst the pain of heartbreak

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this is a really beautiful and poignant poem NoizeLoves

quartz cave Jun 17, 2024, 11:53 AM

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raven marlin This is a really striking and emotional piece

Thank you

rapid lotus Jun 17, 2024, 1:57 PM

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I'm not one for abstract comparisons/metaphors but I like your imagery. I like "The pebbles wither and wither again".

quartz cave Oct 8, 2024, 5:27 AM

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The poem explores themes of love, pain, and emotional turmoil. It reflects on the paradoxical nature of love, which can bring both profound joy and deep sorrow. The speaker grapples with feelings of loss and longing, highlighting the struggle between hope and despair. The poem delves into the complexities of love, grief, and vulnerability. It juxtaposes beautiful imagery with painful emotions, suggesting that love can resurrect both joy ("tears of flame") and sorrow ("wavering pain"). The imagery of nature, such as gardens and flowers, is used to symbolize the speaker's internal state.

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