An Unhinged Vending Machine

[sage prism]

A flyer from a new vending machine in the neighborhood, check it out!

[proven cairn]

the personification of a vending machine I like the humor a lot

[sage prism]

@clever estuary

[clever estuary]

"Given I'm supposed to cherish
Everything other than me"...
I already messaged you about this today 🧍
We gon have a fight If this continues

[sage prism]

I know I remember okay? Its just expression I can't suppress that.

@restive laurel

@sage prism

@gleaming marsh

@void hamlet

@coral cove

@sage prism

this is dark comedy at it's finest

[sage prism]

Thank you!!

[sage prism]

@sage prism

@obsidian yew

[sage prism]

@knotty girder

@sage prism

[proven cairn]

what happens if someone says no to that vending machine, a hypothetical

[sage prism]

Boom, beautiful, short, sweet, great use of figurative speech

Well done, fantastic

[void hamlet]

firstly, the way you personify a vending machine to express such deep emotions is both unique and compelling. the metaphor of exchanging tears for sweets perfectly captures the silent, unspoken struggles we all face. your words flow effortlessly, making the reader feel the hidden pain behind the seemingly mundane.

i love how you use simple, everyday imagery to convey profound emotions. the lines about cherishing everything except yourself hit hard, reflecting the often unacknowledged self-neglect many of us experience. the simplicity of your language makes the poem feel more intimate and genuine. absolutely loved it!

[sage prism]

The vending machine is desperate and not receiving something would make it more desperate, so perhaps a new flyer will form trying to persuade the world.

[sage prism]

Thank you!!

[sage prism]

Aww Thanks a bunch Zeno, glad my words could reach you! <33 I appreciate your feedback as always

@sage prism

[void hamlet]

:)))

[sage prism]

@tawdry sundial

[tawdry sundial]

The personification is really humourous and I enjoy it compared to a lot of the more somber poems I read💜 I like how you still managed to keep such a depth to your words even when it's about a relatively silly topic

[sage prism]

Thank youuuuu violet! I'm so honored that a soon famous person is reviewing my work hehe. I'm glad you enjoyed it!!

@dull valve
@obsidian yew
@gleaming marsh

@green talon

[sage prism]

@oblique jetty

@feral minnow

[oblique jetty]

Nice 😭

[feral minnow]

This poem is quite intriguing and darkly humorous

[long tulip]

Wonderful! @feral minnow has just pregressed to level 7!

[feral minnow]

The idea of a vending machine accepting tears instead of money and providing sweets in return is a clever and original one!

The repetition of the phrase "I want to cry so bad for my life" adds a sense of desperation and urgency to the poem, and the reference to the horror "used decades of the apathetic hide" adds a layer of depth to the character of the vending machine

so yeah its an unique and memorable piece!

[sage prism]

Thank youuuu sm for your words! I'm grateful for your feedbacks, glad you liked this one!!

[restive laurel]

Wow, this was a very interesting read

Such an interesting concept and metaphor

Great job, Puff! 🙂

[sage prism]

Thank you Skugi, I appreciate you

[sage prism]

@cobalt cape

[cobalt cape]

Damnnn

At first I was like

Okay

It's a fun happy poem

Then I read the next line

And I'm like

😭😭😭😭

Nice poemmm

You expressed everything in a unique way

Good job

[sage prism]

Thank youuuuuuuu fireyyy I'm glad you liked it :)) <33

[sage prism]

@sage prism

[sage prism]

@west socket

[west socket]

🤔 it’s not money isn’t it ?

[sage prism]

It's not, Sir

[west socket]

I’m confused

You agreeing or disagreeing lmao

[sage prism]

I'm saying its not money lol

[west socket]

I meant instead of no

In the 3rd line it’s no money

[sage prism]

Yeah it is

[west socket]

Shouldn’t it be not instead of no

That’s what I was saying earlier

😅

[sage prism]

No, Its not wrong, I just chose to let it be 'It's no money'

[west socket]

Oh ok

[sage prism]

@rare marsh

[rare marsh]

Ooo I love this!

This is really good puff!

I am in love with your poems now