#My Beloved, My Spouse

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faint slate
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Oh, my love,
I am before you, why go to them?
Oh, my love,
What do you see in them that you don't see in me?

I want your troubles,
I want your burdens,
Give me them and I will free you,
Don't go to them for they will hurt you.

Wherever I am dwells peace,
Wherever I am dwells life.
I've shown you, I've spoken to you,
So why do you choose them over me?

Why is your heart tainted with unfaithfulness?
Why is your heart tainted with lust?
Why do you desire my enemy?
I am showing you life, giving you life, so why?

Oh, my love,
I forgive you.
Come to me, cry to me, don't be ashamed.
I still love you so take this cloth and wipe your tears.

Oh, my love,
I forgive you.
I ask you to follow me,
Do not take advantage of me.

Please don't quiver away,
I want you and only you.
Please don't ponder on thoughts,
I will heal you, I vow to it.

I will love you forever,
I will comfort you forever.
Do not be ashamed as I'm saying this,
I knew your sin before you even commit it.

Oh, my love,
I'm your spouse,
Only I can love you like this.

Who can take your sins away?
Who can be mocked all day?
Who will be there to give you life?
Not your lovers!

Only I can take your sins;
Only I can take the mockery;
Only I will treasure you with life:
Only I, the Most High, will do these things.

My beloved,
Accept me.
My spouse,
Only I can set you free!

         —Isaiah 41:13
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@outer sandal
@kindred heron
@eager sandal
@cursive prism

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@wicked sky
@hot skiff

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@lavish elm

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@golden oasis

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@orchid vigil

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@fossil frigate

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@golden oasis

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@golden oasis

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@humble raft

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@burnt dune

fossil frigate
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feedback tomorrow

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*leave

faint slate
fossil frigate
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cathuh i will do it tomm

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need some sleep

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golden oasis
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eager sandal
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'I want your troubles,
I want your burdens,'
*hands you the limitation of English Literature for the compliments of this poem

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The Whole gang is here

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golden oasis
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Dang this was lovely
The lognigness for the person is real
It was sucha lovely poem
*Sobs
Claps

outer sandal
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i absolutely love this! idk how to say it but it really touched, its quite beautiful

eager sandal
faint slate
eager sandal
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*gardening tools

outer sandal
eager sandal
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What you smokin ma kenzzy

outer sandal
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Angela my new friend blursob

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eager sandal
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we will become good discord users

golden oasis
outer sandal
outer sandal
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we are amazing users

golden oasis
eager sandal
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*sighs

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*drinks

golden oasis
eager sandal
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*leaves

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faint slate
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@eager sandal everybody loves me, if you kill me they will go against you 😝

outer sandal
eager sandal
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wadafuqyouallsmokidafuq

outer sandal
faint slate
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*sighs

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outer sandal
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Perfect is so done, well back to annoying angela igCOFFEEEow

faint slate
outer sandal
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eager sandal
eager sandal
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nvm

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*leaves

golden oasis
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eager sandal
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shouldn't she.. ma poet? @whole anchor

faint slate
faint slate
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@fervent acorn

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@gaunt socket

fossil frigate
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I think it is pretty rough, you have not used any poetic device. You can use better world at some places
You can shorten it for more consistent and precise language. It is very plain.

In the third stanza shift
whenever i/you am, peace dwells,

Similar for next line.
It needs some serious revision on your part.

orchid vigil
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Wherever I am dwells peace,
Wherever I am dwells life.
I've shown you, I've spoken to you,
So why do you choose them over me? Wow this is real

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My beloved,
Accept me.
My spouse,
Only I can set you free! wow i love the last stanza too

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9.4/10

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@drifting moss