Heart of He

[plain axle]

"Two's a crowd",
What's 3 halves crowds?
Heart of love,
Heart of silver,
Heart of-

Heart of love
Beyond what they say
Love for love
Love for lust
Lust for love
Lust for lust
Stemmed from hate of some
Two's luck, have this love

Heart of silver
Pure as gold
And shines as steel
No, not as cold
No other fares
To boundless bliss
Similarly,
Born of pain

Heart of-
Of heart of love
Oh, heart of silver
Oh, heart of parent
Of heart of tissue
Oh, heart of knowledge
Of heart of ego
Oh, heart of regret
Oh, heart of laugh
Oh, heart of heart
Of heart, oh, heart
Oh, heart, of hearts
Of hearts
His heart
Detached from meaning
Such like his brain
From rattled knowledge
Passive purpose
Docile passion
Of doubled life
A double-life
Of joy doubled
Work tripled
Of mature, quadrupled
Of potential, that's doubled
Doubled, and a quarter
Of heart of heart
Oh, heart of hearts
Oh, heart of three
Oh, layered heart
Of heart, agreed
Oh, heart of his
Oh hear his art
That heart of He
Of hearts of three

[hybrid rose]

Wonderful! @plain axle has just pregressed to level 1!

[plain axle]

I free verse

[plain axle]

@ruby abyss

[ruby abyss]

I’m hereeee

This is such beauty mr ReadyOnes

It truly feels amazing to read this

[ruby abyss]

I was absolutely focused on this I became indulged in your piece

[plain axle]

You flatter me

[plain axle]

@ionic cedar

[ionic cedar]

Oh I hate the formatting

It's like touching a bad textured blanket

It's not bad but it's..a lot, if you put some of the lines together, varied the line lengths, it's a good idea for a poem and the repetition could definitely work

[plain axle]

This one is an ugly combo of the line spacing and how short the lines are?

I never even considered the formatting, but it makes a lot of sense that it's a lot more important than I give it credit for.

[ionic cedar]

Formatting can make me decide not to feedback a poem if I'm just picking them from poetry feedback

[plain axle]

Oh!

This one is supposed to feel like a rant, though that could probably be better achieved if I were to bunch some of the short lines together

No reason really for a lot of those to stand alone as they are

[tawdry mirage]

*No reason really

for a lot of those to stand

alone as they are*

- 0nes4ndzer0s