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Newly alone / at home / bed / best friend / music / my love / suffering, suffocating / in all the space / under the cover // You / your plan? / to make / my misery / the mystery / of why me // I'm locked / these thoughts / no key / the meaning / is mean / the unseen / appears to me / you / my closed eyes / brings me / to you // I sleep / I dream / fitfully / drowsy / when I wake / I swear / my heart can't take / the thought of / you///

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I am so confused

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I thought your work was wordy

So, I stripped it

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Ohh

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the shortest of the line suggests every click of the clock

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Still very confused

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how time stops in heart break

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Ohhh

I get it now

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I gave your poem another angle

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Yes

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I think maybe it's in a form like "I Never Felt So Alone"

moving it from poem to minimalized lyric

lying in bed is stretched on the rack

self-torture

when what you want doesn't match what you've got

since you got absence, rejection and dismay

you, the tree from which the bows are made / yew were the weapon that slayed me / you punctured me until I grew / out of loving you //