Inferno

[misty stirrup]

||Check some details for the theme below. They are important for those who want to understand more.||

Inferno by Ao bai

𝙸 𝚊𝚖 𝚜𝚞𝚌𝚑 𝚊 righteous m𝚊𝚗
𝙾𝚗𝚕𝚢 𝚜𝚝𝚞𝚙𝚒𝚍 Lamb,
𝙸𝚝 𝚒𝚜 𝚕𝚘𝚟𝚎 𝚝𝚑𝚎𝚗.

I feel her, I see her
A burning heart with desire
I fear, I fear
This is out of my control
Maria

𝙸𝚝 𝚒𝚜 𝚍𝚒𝚛𝚎.
I am fearful, I am tense
𝙸 shall 𝚙𝚊𝚗𝚒𝚌
𝚂𝚎𝚎𝚒𝚗𝚐 𝚑𝚎𝚛 𝚑𝚘𝚕𝚍𝚒𝚗𝚐 𝚑𝚊𝚗𝚍𝚜 𝚠𝚒𝚝𝚑 𝚊𝚗𝚘𝚝𝚑𝚎𝚛 𝚖𝚊𝚗?
𝚃𝚑𝚒𝚜 𝚒𝚜 𝚗𝚘𝚝 𝚖𝚢 𝚏𝚊𝚞𝚕𝚝.
𝚆𝚑𝚊𝚝𝚎𝚟𝚎𝚛 𝙸 𝚑𝚊𝚟𝚎 𝚋𝚞𝚒𝚕𝚝
𝚆𝚊𝚜 𝚋𝚞𝚛𝚗𝚎𝚍 𝚍𝚘𝚠𝚗 𝚠𝚒𝚝𝚑 𝚐𝚞𝚒𝚕𝚝.

𝚂𝚑𝚎, 𝚗𝚘𝚝 𝚠𝚎, 𝚜𝚑𝚘𝚞𝚕𝚍 𝚍𝚎𝚊𝚕 𝚠𝚒𝚝𝚑 𝚒𝚝.
𝙸𝚝 𝚒𝚜 𝚑𝚘𝚠 𝙸 𝚏𝚎𝚕𝚝 𝚒𝚝.
𝚃𝚑𝚎 𝚕𝚘𝚟𝚎 𝚏𝚘𝚛 𝚘𝚝𝚑𝚎𝚛𝚜 𝚒𝚜 𝚏𝚒𝚕𝚝𝚑,
𝙵𝚒𝚛𝚜𝚝 𝚏𝚒𝚕𝚕𝚎𝚍 𝚠𝚒𝚝𝚑 𝚖𝚒𝚛𝚝𝚑.
𝙰𝚜 𝚖𝚢 𝚑𝚎𝚊𝚛𝚝 𝚋𝚎𝚊𝚝𝚜 𝚏𝚊𝚜𝚝𝚎𝚛,
𝙸𝚝 𝚒𝚜 𝚔𝚒𝚕𝚕𝚎𝚍 𝚋𝚒𝚝 𝚋𝚢 𝚋𝚒𝚝 𝚋𝚢 𝚝𝚑𝚎𝚒𝚛 𝚕𝚊𝚞𝚐𝚑𝚝𝚎𝚛.

𝙸𝚝 𝚒𝚜 𝚊 𝚏𝚒𝚛𝚎,
𝙰 𝚋𝚞𝚛𝚗𝚒𝚗𝚐 𝚍𝚎𝚜𝚒𝚛𝚎.
𝙸𝚝 𝚒𝚜 a 𝚜𝚒𝚗
𝙸 𝚖𝚞𝚜𝚝 𝚠𝚒𝚗.
𝙵𝚘𝚛 𝚑𝚎𝚛 𝚜𝚒𝚛𝚎,
𝙸 𝚜𝚑𝚊𝚕𝚕 𝚋𝚞𝚛𝚗 𝚢𝚘𝚞 𝚋𝚘𝚝𝚑 𝚒𝚗 Hellf𝚒𝚛𝚎.

𝙸𝚝 𝚒𝚜 𝚗𝚘𝚝 𝚖𝚢 𝚏𝚊𝚞𝚕𝚝, 𝚒𝚝 𝚒𝚜 𝚢𝚘𝚞𝚛 𝚙𝚕𝚊𝚗, 𝙰𝚜 𝚢𝚘𝚞 𝚑𝚊𝚟𝚎 𝚖𝚊𝚍𝚎 𝚖𝚎 𝚊 𝚋𝚛𝚘𝚔𝚎𝚗 𝚖𝚊𝚗.

This broken man is a devil, for I beat their soul in an inferno anvil.

𝚆𝚑𝚢 𝚌𝚊𝚕𝚕 𝚖𝚎?
𝚆𝚑𝚢 𝚜𝚑𝚊𝚖𝚎 𝚖𝚎?

𝙾𝚑 𝙶𝚘𝚍, 𝚏𝚘𝚛𝚐𝚒𝚟𝚎 This man 𝚘𝚏 𝚝𝚑𝚎𝚎.

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||# Theme and direction

The inferno is much like a song it comes after watching The hunchback of Notre-Dame.||

||This is a terrible attempt to create something that good, but I am satisfied with the jealousy and confusion theme that it has picked during the process.||

I hope you enjoy it.
This song is not good for pure people and people below 16

The original song is given below, do listen it as it is powerful.

@median nacelle

@pearl anchor

[median nacelle]

Beautiful poem
8/10

[misty stirrup]

why don't you nitpick about it

[median nacelle]

Because i don't get it😭

[pearl anchor]

Ahem ahem

@misty stirrup

*pats on the back

[misty stirrup]

[pearl anchor]

says the man who said we should convey the theme better

Okay

okay

[misty stirrup]

it is below

[misty stirrup]

here

[median nacelle]

@misty stirrup poetica explained it to me, it's really good😭

[misty stirrup]

[cunning talon]

xD

[pearl anchor]

Ma bai got the inferno XD

[misty stirrup]

well if you are stable, go hear hellfire song

nope

[median nacelle]

I'm not in the mood to

[misty stirrup]

i don't want serious description, just a theme will be enough, like i added jealousy and confusion.
You can write theme: betrayal/ love/ confusion or any one of those

that will be enough

[pearl anchor]

It's all good I'm complimenting you

[misty stirrup]

*pats

*leaves

[pearl anchor]

*pats on the back

*leaves

[misty stirrup]

@swift palm

[swift palm]

A VERUS POEM!!

[misty stirrup]

[swift palm]

Woah, I really like how you compare the jealousy you feel—at seeing her with another man—with inferno.

Why call me?
Why shame me?

This part so simple yet I find this one hits the guts. Is this referring to maria or god? Whoever it is, the simple fact that they're calling you fills you with shame. I really like this part.

What a bold move to include her name in your poem tho LMAO

[hazy geyser]

*What a bold move to

include her name in your poem

tho LMAO*

- monseuri

[swift palm]

See haiku agrees

Maria is actually a cookie in my country

[misty stirrup]

its god maria

[misty stirrup]

@swift palm listen to this it will clear your question

if you have seen the hunchback of notredame then its inspired from hellgiree song

i have taken suble lines too

[swift palm]

Oh 💀

[misty stirrup]

[misty stirrup]

@mortal basin

[spiral sail]

𝙸𝚝 𝚒𝚜 𝚊 𝚏𝚒𝚛𝚎,
𝙰 𝚋𝚞𝚛𝚗𝚒𝚗𝚐 𝚍𝚎𝚜𝚒𝚛𝚎.
𝙸𝚝 𝚒𝚜 a 𝚜𝚒𝚗
𝙸 𝚖𝚞𝚜𝚝 𝚠𝚒𝚗.
𝙵𝚘𝚛 𝚑𝚎𝚛 𝚜𝚒𝚛𝚎,
𝙸 𝚜𝚑𝚊𝚕𝚕 𝚋𝚞𝚛𝚗 𝚢𝚘𝚞 𝚋𝚘𝚝𝚑 𝚒𝚗 Hell f𝚒𝚛𝚎 wow

really good

[mortal basin]

Somuch power

[misty stirrup]

i drinked redbull

[misty stirrup]

@sour pier

i don't usually write this kind of stuff

[sour pier]

Interesting and thought provoking piece, with some great imagery and metaphors

The repetition of certain phrases adds a sense of urgency to the poem, while the shifting between diff pov and voices adds complexity and depth

It's clear that the poem touches on themes of morality, love, and justice, with the "righteous man" and the "wicked man" facing off in a moral battle

and the use of the inferno as a setting for this conflict is particularly evocative

[misty stirrup]

Cool, have you watched hunchback of notre dame from disney

It is based on that

Hellfire song I have tagged it in theme below poem

Check it out it is powerful

[daring linden]

@brittle thunder

[brittle thunder]

er

OH

you're versus!

I thought it was another person

[daring linden]

I don't know you!

You changed name too

[brittle thunder]

Interesting use of font, the spacing is really spacing

[brittle thunder]

what's my old name

[daring linden]

I copied the poem from the Disney picture hunchback of notredame

[daring linden]

I don't know

May be you can help this old man with the name

My memory

[brittle thunder]

"It is not my fault, it is your plan, as you made me a broken man"

[hazy geyser]

*"It is not my fault,

it is your plan, as you made

me a broken man"*

- cafune.lavune

[brittle thunder]

https://tenor.com/view/cat-claps-clapping-cute-gif-14440436985127897764

[daring linden]

Time change as poem theme change too

But writing poem don't change

[brittle thunder]

I forgor

[daring linden]

Cool

[brittle thunder]

YESS!!!

I also like the "it is a sin, I must win."

also I would like to ask

"𝚃𝚑𝚎 𝚕𝚘𝚟𝚎 𝚏𝚘𝚛 𝚘𝚝𝚑𝚎𝚛𝚜 𝚒𝚜 𝚏𝚒𝚕𝚝𝚑" what does this mean in the story

[daring linden]

It's love for other - normal love, it can be interpreted as doing self love is better than loving other

[hybrid idol]

A simple but heart touching poem. You compared the pain of such a sight for some so excruciating. I understand that the man in the poem compared to the song is much simpler whereas in the song it sounds like a king or someone in high position. But it is very relatable to all positions no matter what you put in. I like that you recite it like a ballad, but also not a ballad. What i mean is, you go through the different stages of experiencing a cheating spouse from the firt stanza to the lasst, which expresses the pain. Beautiful poem!

[brittle thunder]

Ooou

that's more understandable

[brittle thunder]

So true, it's like a ballad but not

[daring linden]

I want to write ballad

They can be subg

Sung

And are remembered

[brittle thunder]

It's so you core, you should definetly do it

tag me next time

[daring linden]

Imagine, in 3000, people will say, there was a Verus who like to sing ballad like we say for bards and homer

[brittle thunder]

These past few days I thought your name is versus

I just knew it now

[daring linden]

[daring linden]

That's the intention

[brittle thunder]

If I'm mistakenly not mistaken

year 3000 don't have knights, what interest you in the year of 3000

[daring linden]

a random number

https://tenor.com/view/peepo-pepe-gif-24159111

[brittle thunder]

deny the cry

anyways, can't wait for your next ballad

[daring linden]

Well I will try

[mortal basin]

is this inspired by hellfire from the hunchback of notre dame!!

i loveeee that movie