#The One Side

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errant snow
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I remembered seeing you in jewels,
Wandering thoughts encased in headphones.
Music blasting – indie probably, too.
Stayed in the zone, swayed in the zone,
Played in the zone, and remained in the zone.

All I could do was stare at the wavy hair.

One-sided mirrors witnessed the flash,
How every moment was a dumbfounded splash.
Infatuation but was never a realised connection,
Had to depart first —
And now the heart hurts from the separation.

You never realised or did you now?

The second I left the sparkling presence.
Fresh off a breakup and I was hawking again.
Heart was flocking in temptation,
But you wouldn’t realise how it was, right?
I mean… the love was most likely from one side.

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@valid sage
@slow wyvern
@tranquil forum
@indigo python
@near forum ( i am so sorry, Skugi blursob )

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@random ether
@hidden lava
@tame compass
@languid geyser
@random mesa

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@gaunt surge ( based on ur prompt )

compact wing
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I like it

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:)

tame compass
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'I mean… the love was most likely from one side.'
Can't be one sided if you sitting in front of the mirror.

errant snow
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Ma Brotha...

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*prepares tea

tame compass
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Ma brotha

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*sits

errant snow
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It appears you came for this poem?
*pours tea

tame compass
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Mmmm..
Did you by any chance changed the tea leaves?

errant snow
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Understood, my good sir.
I did. Trying out some new herbal incenses this time.

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It does have a sombre punch; much like this poem.

tame compass
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Now if you may allow me

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I may leave brotha

errant snow
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Please, take your leave.

tame compass
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o7

errant snow
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I shall see you soon enough.

tame compass
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Indeed.

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*leaves

errant snow
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o7

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o/

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*leaves

random ether
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A poem on unrequited love...🤧
It was nice overall altho I'm a sucker for a good flow and rhyme in the poem, rhyme was ok and nice, but the flow and rhythm weren't as consistent as I like them 🤧

near forum
errant snow
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@spice thorn

gaunt surge
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I like the way your rhymes and patterns are kind of uneven and scattered. I don't know if this was intended or not, but I interpreted this inconsistency as a manifestation of how the encounter with this stranger threw you off guard and completely captivated you. Basically, it's as though the fleeting feeling of being drawn to a total stranger is being shown in the disorganized, half-rhyming confusion of your poetry. I think it's a great effect!
Amazing job as always NoizeLoves

spice thorn
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HRRRRR

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I IMAGINED THIS IN AN AIRPORT

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I DONT KNOW WHY

errant snow
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This was based on real life.

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There was this girl in the jewellry store...

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She was stunning at the time and allat

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My eyes couldn't leave her, but I had to leave like I said in the poem.

strange jettyBOT
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*My eyes couldn't leave

her, but I had to leave like

I said in the poem.*

spice thorn
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BRO

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ITS OK

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WE ALL HAVE CRUSHES ON RANDOM PEOPLE FROM TIME TO TIME

errant snow
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IKR

spice thorn
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LIKE THAT ONE TIME THERE WAS THIS REALLY FINE GUY WHO HAD THE FLUFFIEST BLOND HAIR AND GREEN EYES AND HE SMILED AT ME BECUASE WE SAW EACHOTHER FROM ACROSS THE HAIR SALON

spice thorn
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AND HE GOT A BUZZ CUT

errant snow
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WHAT

spice thorn
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I WAS GONNA CRY

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I TEXTED MY BESTIE INSTANTLY

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HIS HAIR

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G O N E

errant snow
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N A U R

spice thorn
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Y E A U R