should i just leave?

[lost frost]

"im sorry if i did something"
how do i explain its beyond just forgiving?
im tired
im hopeless
im drained
hearing that word but never seeing any change.

"i didnt mean to make you mad"
how do i convey its not just anger?
im helpless
im hurt
im pained
suffocated, trapped within your grip.

"i'll try not to repeat it"
how do i plead for it to stop?
its a toxic cycle
we both know
your promises hollow,
your words just for show.

"its okay"
i whisper, but i deceive myself,
for my heart aches, as i lose myself;
perhaps its time to face the truth
accept its not meant to be,
find the strength to let go-
should i just leave?

@vernal grotto

@coarse moon

@tropic folio

@hardy cypress

[vernal grotto]

It's super raw and insightful in what appears to be a relationship that's losing its strength or perhaps realizing there wasn't any foundation at the first place. The dialogues used as the start of each stanza makes it clear to the reader about the excuses made. The contemplating thought of what the poet should do is quite encouraging but at the same time has a slight tone of fear, or frightened about something. It's a good one, Zeno :))

[lost frost]

thank you :)
Im glad you liked it

oh why does ikari keep disappearing from the members list-

@coarse moon

[lost frost]

@vernal grotto i dunno if this is a glitch but why does ikari keep disappearing from here??? 😭

[vernal grotto]

Oh but I'm able to see all the pinges for her!

It must be a glitch if they keep disappearing at your side

Want me to ping him too?

[lost frost]

yeah please-

bcs they disappeared in my last post too

[lost frost]

me too, but i cant see them in the members list

look

[vernal grotto]

That's weird lemme ping them too

[vernal grotto]

Ahh

@coarse moon sweet Ikari you're needed~

[lost frost]

okiii

[lost frost]

lmao real 😭

[coarse moon]

oh what.

hello !

im here now

three pings yet i don’t think i ever actually saw the thread🧍
discord explain

okay reading ten years belated

[coarse moon]

DAMN? OW? RUDE?
i don’t think i’ve ever been so called out before my GOD
personally attacked smh/j
i absolutely adore this poem, the use of quotations really helps build on it and makes the message all the more clear
it’s simple yet emotional, and extremely relatable
i felt this one word for word im gonna be totally honest

despite how raw it is, it still has a nice flow and doesn’t feel spontaneous which makes it easy to read and comprehend as well
overall a job very well done (also ow. this one called me out! in case i hadn’t said it yet [i know i have])

[lost frost]

literally

[lost frost]

omggg 😭

ikari youre so relatable and sweet

[lost frost]

im so glad you liked it :)

[coarse moon]

i’d hope not im a traumatized cheese addict
jokes aside though LOL yes i adored this poem
i may be slightly biased because i relate to it so heavily but really truly it’s well put together
it really displays what makes free verse stand out from the rest— that a lack of consistency doesn’t make it any less powerful or any less poetic

[lost frost]

ong us 😭

[lost frost]

awwww