#A Poet's Truth

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astral saffron
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An expression about what made this poet a poet.

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@severe lotus

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@short yew

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@deft knoll

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@sinful wasp

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@astral saffron

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@thick shell

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@balmy ruin

thick shell
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Damn this is fire asf

astral saffron
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@astral saffron

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@eager sky

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@warm shuttle hope you don't mind the ping! I'd love to know your thoughts if you'd like to read this one :))

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@midnight warren

sinful wasp
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love this poem. very very good usage of repetition. i dont quite get the last part though, do you think you can elaborate on it please?

astral saffron
# sinful wasp love this poem. very very good usage of repetition. i dont quite get the last pa...

Thank you, khaled! Yeah sure. I believe the poet here is implying on having no individuality of their own, and seems to be in the faulty belief that they are supposed to be always among others. And eventually towards the ending the alternative of the theme is expressed, saying Align them with whatever their eyes hold, what their persona holds, and for that the reader has to come a lot nearer than reading words, they have to be near enough to feel the sacrifices of the poet, that's what made them who they are.

sinful wasp
astral saffron
severe lotus
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oh i love this piece a lot actually
the use of repetition is beautifully done, it really expresses the message well and intensifies the purpose intended
it speaks personally and almost confrontationally, both to those who relate to the narrator, and those who relate to the people who may have driven someone to this point— as it’s far from something that comes naturally
overall the flow is really well done, the language is graphic and vivid but not overly complex
it keeps everything unique and interesting without being overly difficult to comprehend or overly simplistic

midnight warren
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Woah I automatically love the format of the first stanza, it calls more attention to the second one, where I think you place the deepest message. It effectively makes it more memorable.

Suggestion:
In the fourth line (For the lights that doesn't last any longer) there's just a small grammar mistake--"lights" is plural, which means the correct format would be "don't."

I LOVE the sixth line, I really find myself identifying with that. I've gone through some stuff where it really is just better to be alone with your tears than with people--even if those people want to comfort you. Sometimes the only thing that can comfort you is the fact that you at least have the power to shed tears, so having others try to make it go away can sometimes be something we don't want (idk if that makes any sense to you, but it does make sense in my brain LOL).

Ik my interpretation of that line kind of broke away from the overall message of the poem, but sometimes there are unknown messages hidden in poetry, that's why I love it when other people find things in my poetry that I didn't even know was there.

Overall, amazing work heartpotat

astral saffron
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wow. just wow. the repititon is beautifully executed. this poems speaks to me deeply.

my favourite lines would have to be:
"align me with dreams, for i never seem to reach myself"
"align me with pain, for i never stop unless you acknowledge me" chef kiss. keep writing, i adore these. 🤍

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severe lotus
short yew
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oh im just seeing this 😭

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i get how this poem encapsulates what shaped the poet(you)into who they are.
this poem really hit me. it’s raw and honest, showing how your struggles, dreams, and need for recognition fuel your poetry. the desire to be aligned with so many aspects of life speaks to a deep longing for understanding and meaning. it makes me appreciate the sacrifices and emotional depths that go into creating art.

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great jobb!!!

astral saffron