#He Loves Me (Not)

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cyan trellis
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He loves me;
When we talk,
the conversation never stops.
Your enthusiasm, like a wildfire,
ignites my heart, leaving me with the heat of passion.

He loves me not;
It feels like a race I’ll never win,
a tunnel with no light at the end,
a story where I’m the fool,
fumbling again and again.

He loves me;
Behind my eyes are dreams—
dreams where the sound of you sleeping next to me
put me to rest like the softest lullaby,
dreams of feeling your smile against my lips.

He loves me not;
Your eyes tell a different story—
a story without me or we,
a story where I’m a subplot in your script,
where I’m a footnote and not your love interest.

He loves me;
But your smile cracks through the clouds,
like hot chocolate during a harsh Midwestern winter,
like lemonade in a blazing sun belt summer;
Justin Bonomo would be jealous at how it makes me fold.

He loves me not;
I want to tell you how I feel,
but I fear that it’s unrequited.
I can turn you into poetry,
but I can’t make you love me.

charred tangle
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"i can turn you into poetry, but i can't make you love me"

damn.

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I love the concept of your poem :)

cyan trellis
charred tangle
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This explains this generation -excluding others ofc- very well.

random blade
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I'd change "put me to sleep" to "put me to rest" just to not repeat the word and maybe say sth along the lines of "and not the love interest/guiding star of your protagonist" instead of jst star
It's a lovely poem ♡

cyan trellis
cyan trellis
topaz moss
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I want to tell you how I feel,
but I fear that it’s unrequited.
I can turn you into poetry,
but I can’t make you love me. man thats so beautifull 😭

calm minnow
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love this. i absolutely adore the usage of the “he loves me, he loves me not” game!! its such good material for poetry and im glad you did it justice by writing such a nice poem with it

cyan trellis
cyan trellis
topaz moss
stiff oxide